by VelvetDarkness
Waaauw...SIMPLY WAUWWWW.. I can't even describe how intense and hot that was. O.o
It's very well written and atmospheric - I felt a little like she wasn't as conflicted as I'd imagine, her kingdom just having been wiped out. And he seemed to vary between sensitive and a monster, which i found a bit confusing. It's not enough chemistry for a romance novel relationship, but I'm interested to see where it goes. And I agree on the 'pus' metaphor - eww! Well done overall. :)
I liked this first chapter, but I'm afraid that I won't like the ones to follow as this chapter contained just the first taste of BDSM and it's going to get more extreme in later chapters. However, your writing is impeccable.
Yes in a way, i am having hard to believe its really belongs under the category of BDSM, but thats really besides the point.. :)
You did a very good job at writing this, and i really do hope you can write more chapters. I do hope you will write the next chapter very soon... I really want to know what will happen next with our newlyweds.
Excellent writing - please be a fast writer. I am hoping for more of the same
...This belongs in a printed book! This was simply amazing! I can't use near enough exclamation marks I tell you!!!! You should be a published author if you aren't already. This was simply brilliant and I hope that there is much more to come!