All Comments on 'Alan Ch. 09'

Well worth the wait. Please just don't make us wait too long.:)

Joel

This continues to be very interesting! I'm always looking for the next chapter!

Nice story, but you really should learn a bit of anatomy. The hymen is outside the vagina, at the opening.

fAB story i started chap1 yesterday and plan on doing 4 a day until completion, i LOOK FORWARD (oops) to them all and any new ones.Also the knucklehead who made the hymen observation had better explore a little female anatomy because he doesn't have a clue its not covering the opening but resides inside the vagina not particularly deep but inside none the less.

Thisis one of my pet peeves. I don't know where the idea got started that the hymen was inside the vagina, it's not. The hymen is and always remains the opening to the vagina. Granted that's inside the labia (vaginal lips... English spelling should be banned, Latin spelling should be banned... okay all spelling should be banned.)

Once the hymen has been torn it remains. In fact it can be torn more than once. It can also be so elastic that it doesn't tear until childbrith. (Perhaps not even then, but I'm not sure. We're not allowed to link to other sites, but authors, and I suppose other can go to stories on line dot net and see a photo of a hymen. You can also find a guide to penis sizes there. I find it most interesting that the average white man has a significantly large penis than the average black man.

Who would have thunk?

I really like how you made her a fully informed participant in this chapter. Keep it up!

Playful & Suave makes for fine read!Ty much.

What about her ass, such a lovely girl and he doesnt get her ass, too bad.

An English girl going around calling everyone "mate" would put her at the bottom of the social order mate.

She then becomes welsh "boyo" and when you have her shouting out spiffin I really will know you really understand "Brits"

Gee whiz,she comes from London, do you think she might know the Queen.

What a load of crap.

DO NOT TALK LIKE THAT!

Hardly anyone says love anymore, the Welsh use boyo, and you might as well say cor blimey to show how out of touch you are

Yes, they do.

Not your best chapter. First the scene with Dr. Massimo were he starts freely telling a complete stranger all his secrets. It's understandable since Massimo has power also, but Alan comes off childish. He does show some remorse over the Met employee being fired and arrested then in the next scene he causes a waitress to drop plates of food just to show off which could easily get her fired. Despite promising the stranger Massimo that he would be more careful, the next person he meets, a strange and foreign girl who seems to have a fake British accent, he reveals all and starts showing off in public. Then there is the Hymen thing, which is a common mistake, it protects the vagina, it is not inside the vagina. The dialog from the character Chloe sounds like something from a 1940's Hollywood version of a Londoner. Your a good writer, this just wasn't your best work. This is a long series, if not all chapters are perfect, I guess that makes you human. Overall so far, it's a very good story. I could see it as a movie, but then the sex would have to be much milder and that would be a loss.

Alan certainly hasn't learned very much about using, let alone developing the Power. He just continues to use the Power to engage in trivial sexual encounters, including this one with the language-challenged English nanny. Trivial in, trivial out.

Clearly everyone from England speaks some horrible combination of English, Scottish, and welsh. Sigh. Do some real research, instead of believing fox news.

Well, you made him look like brainless chap and simply doing same thing again and again.

Where's Chapter 8

To bad Chapter 8 was never published

chapter 8 pleeeeease!

Love British accents...

Where's chapter 8?

I think this story would have been better with chapter 8 where he shreds Pauline's cherry.

Yeah, what happened to Chapter 8...the last thing you said in Chapter 7 was about Pauline losing her virginity to Alan...then THIS BUSINESS!!

You really should rectify this issue, it caused you to get a 4-star ranking!

Still no chapter 8, not that surprising since the Author has not been active since they wrote this series back in 2006. Hopefully nothing bad happened to them

Story seem to loose the plot this chapter, its as if written by a different person who doesn't remember the previous chapters details

You string me along for 7 chapters, get me interested and the BOOM! No chapter 8, no Pauline. Nothing. Now, I have no interest to finish other chapters. Just wasted half my day reading the first 7. Shame on you…. Just kidding, I’ll survive.

No Brit talks like that, especially an 18 yr old girl. Anyone would think we're in 1920. I was laughing and cringing at the words used.

What happened to chapter 8..... with Kate's sister?

Oi guvna, what's this here chapter all about? Doesn't really add anything to the story. Just another random girl for him to fuck. It's funny how fast these stories go down that route. Not once has he shown any kind of remorse over how he's fucking around on Pauline, his recently deflowered girlfriend. I guess this is how it's going to be.

Alan could easily make bank being a plastic surgeon. Of course he wouldn't need to do any actual surgery; just a quick Seed manipulation and boom, all done. Oh the possibilities...

I appreciate going honest withsomeone here.

I believe ch8 was skipped due to the fact Pauline is under 18 if her sister is 18, I forget if it was stated weithrr she was a sophomore or a junior sport editor

I like this one the best.