All Comments on 'Alan Ch. 25'

I have read and re-read each part of this story and I must say I love the detail and thought you put into it. I think it would make a great book if you were inclined to print it but I doubt it would be allowed in most bookstores. Please keep up the good work.

great story and well written.

WOW!,

You just keep getting better and better. I hope it lasts for a good long wile. A great read.

Absolutely excellent. I'm hooked!

This is without a doubt the best series on literotica.com, bar none. I have reread the entire story at least five times. I wait expectantly for each new chapter. Please keep writing and people will keep on reading.

Thanks,

Joel

Hard to add anything to what everyone else has been saying...Eagerly awaiting the next chapter!

Well as I said in the begining with chapter one this should be a novel. It is well thought out and I eagerly anticipate every new chapter. Your mind is astute and your love of detail is great though thank god you don't gop too far overboard... I still think it should be At least subcatagoried as sci fi fant definatly that air about it. I have a few ideas of what is comming up I am getting a feel for your writing and think I know a few of the things that will be comming in the future however you have suprised me in the past. I would be thrilled to descuss ideas with you... but I will not have a descussion here if you want to get ahold of me I do have Literoticamail and hope to hear from you.

This piece is one of the best I've seen at this site. Your use of varied diction and thought out dialogue in combination with the fantastic nature of your story have pulled me in. Keep at it, and after some editing it will definitely be worth putting into a novel form; just add a bit of flow between the chapters and you've got a book!

-Roland

I just finished chapter 25...and what else can i say but that I am hooked. The plot is great, the description and attention to details...This is very very good! Keep up the good work.

I can't remember the last time I enjoyed a series as much as I have yours. Please keep up the good work and don't make us wait too long for the next chapter.

almost too good! consorting with the devil?

Briliant! Best chapter yet i loved it!:-)

Like the way Jenna was trained. Now for Kate she can be Submissive with Alan and Dominant with Jenna. will be interesting to see if Scarlet gets her Rug Munched?

Another wasted Chapter with Allan turning another girl into a submissive Lez slut. When will it ever end?

Wasted chapter. Just change the bitches personality. Cool the S&M stuff.

Another BDSM chapter really? Didn't expect there to be two in this story but whatever. It was an interesting way to punish Jenna and, to an extent, reform her from her misguided views. It would have been easier to just alter her mind as someone pointed out, but where's the fun in that? :)