by sexyramlo
remove the last three paragraphs and...Voila`... it's a complete story.
A great story, but the lack of an ending gives it 2/5. Given the time this will never be finished.
As an incomplete story, remove it.
Actually I hate Bro-Sis story
But reading your story..
I have no word...
I liked your siblings love sex story...really. .loved Your story...hope you will update the chapter...bye
I do not know what is wrong with people who give negitive remarks and hide behind the word ANONYMOUS. This is a "Great Story"
The story was lame and it had absolutely no buildup at the beginning and no character development. It was like walking into the movie when it was almost over.
And a bad movie at that.
is needed. not an editor. your story is fine. but, since English is not your primary language, you need help! it drives your readers crazy trying to figure out what you meant by the ridiculous words and phrases you use.
what a very hot story you have to do more have to know if olders find out they could also be brother and sister hot hot hot more more ......
This is so F###ing hot! I can't believe it is not in the HOT stories...WTF are the Literotica Mod's doing! Go on man don't stop for no one! I can't wait for next episode.
Great story, I've been waiting for this for a while and it was great. Keep them coming your a great writer and I love this story that your writing. (By the way ignore the dickheads who keep telling you to stop writing in your style or you grammer is bad because if you don't like it don't read it or write one that's better) Nice work and keep up the work!
you still need to use a good editor way too many stupid goofs. SHOW SOME PRIDE IN YOUR WORK AND SOME RESPECT FOR THE READERS AND ALWAYS USE A GOOD EDITOR. REWRITE ALL STORIES POSTED BEFORE WRITING ANY MORE.
could you finish passion of sin now that your back. ive been hanging ever sine you posted it
Fantastic story, I'm glad you decided to write again. I hope you don't keep us waiting for the rest of this story.