All Comments on 'Alex and Nicki: Sleepy Siblings'

You REALLY need to get an editor..........

great story .. would make a great series

Good story, but it reads like english isen't your first language. It's almost bad enough to make me think it went thru google translator. At least proof read it before posting or ask someone else to...

Not a bad outing. Your characters and the scenario could have used a bit more build up to the conclusion. Add to the fact that while anal sex can be good, I don't think there's a woman who would reax this that agrees she cam go from a dead sleep to full on ass penetration in a couple minutes w/o some serious prep work. Also, your ending felt a tad bit rushed (trust me I get it, sometimes trying to wrap a scene up in a pretty bow is as hard to do as coming up with a good beginning). But overall, you have a decent story with a few minor glitches. I still enjoyed reading your offering, maybe consider passing your next one through an editor first. Can't wait for your next installment!!!

Loved the story...believable (in fantasy world) despite the slightly quick ending; agree with others it would make a great series.

It was a really hot story, and the handful of typos and minor grammatical imperfections really didn't detract from it.

An editor never hurts, but don't be put out by the negativity here. The story was still sexy and mixed in all the right elements for a sleepy buildup to a great incest story.

I wouldn't have minded a longer interlude in her wet pussy, but that's just my personal preference. :p

I was pleased and surprised to find that you are female writing from the male perspective. Great story. We need more stories by females from the female perspective. More please.