All Comments on 'Alice's Restaurant'

This and your other submission today were both wonderful and very well written. A breath of fresh air of otherwise hackneyed submissions.

This story reminds me of the To Serve and Protect series, for which I write. Very nice romance. Well-defined characters, and good motivations behind the sex. Did you know it was picked as an Editors Choice? You should be in contention for a top prize if the story came in time to get votes.

Very nicely written, a pleasure to read something that allows you to see the participants as people rather than just body parts.

Wasn't too keen on the butt plug and the like but thats perhaps just me, seem to get a little too anatomical at that point and a little more like everyone else.

I think there is mileage left in the characters and the situation and hope there is more to come.

Thanks for sharing your work

Keep up the good work!

The story is so beautiful, your language skills are exquisite and all that I ask is for you to keep up this good work.

It is wonderful to see someone that can put together a story that is sex based without having it non-stop. You should definetly continue these characters. You have done an amazing job developing them, it would be a real shame for them to simply disappear.

A very well written "falling in love story" without any sacharine sentiment in a strong story line.

? died or dyed.

I read all four parts of the series, and the were all fantastic. I am amazed at your storytelling ability, engrossing characters, meaningful storylines, LOTS of emotion.

I am looking forward to more of your work, and hoping for more based on these characters.

CUDOS!!!

I am making the same comment on all four parts because they all deserve it.

*swallows hard* Well, Alpaca, I must begin with thank you. I greatly enjoyed this piece for many reasons. Sure, it's nice to dive into a story and not be put off by grammar in the first paragraph, but it's exceptional when the story employs some stimulating vocabulary and can actually be called a story instead of 'just another romp'. The plot (*gasp* Did I just say 'plot' about a piece of erotica?) was engaging from the beginning and successfully built up throughout, ending with a bang complete with warm fuzzies. I never got lost in the action (directionally speaking) and the action never lost my interest (feline-ly speaking) *wink*. Congratulations on a very complete piece of erotica. May you continue and enjoy the same success with all your work.

~lucky

This is the first of your submissions that I've read and I think I've been missing out! I enjoyed this thoroughly and look forward to reading more. Thanks!

The fisting made me a little squemish, thinking that it had to be painful, even though Carrie loved it. I really enjoyed the characters, especially adorable zany Alicia, and thought the writing was exceptional. The dialogue, and story were very believable and I easily found myself drawn into the great characters and what they were feeling. Terrific story!

I must say 'twas a beautiful story

Great sex, of course, but the story itself had a lot of type / grammar issues and parts seemed awfully convenient or contrived. All in all a good read though!

"you can get anything you want at Alice's Restaurant."

it was really great it just totally reminded me of that and is now going to make me think of this whenever i hear it or think of it. lol

A very yummy story! Your brilliant writing brought this all together! Have you ever thought of adding to this story? Thank you!

I enjoyed this story and I'm looking forward to reading chapter two.

fun, and good english!

Some bad can turn into some fab ..... Lovely turnaround ..... Nice reading with a interesting story

I luv it when two hot strangers are brought together by chance and immediately hit it off. Normally I’m a slow reader but I downed this splendid offering in one go. Thank you for a captivating erotic story with an oh so surprising end.

Loved it, lots of great sex but also a good story, off to read more of your stuff thanks

I enjoyed this

Sounds like they both saved each other. A well thought out and written story. I look forward to reading the next part. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.