All Comments on 'Alien Lover Ch. 01'

Just my perspective, but regardless of any other considerations, I don't like your main character so I have no interest in reading any more about him.

Can't wait for next chapter

Didnt Sharon enjoy Leyton's alien nature? So why stage the break up? Also how does Leyton know that she is not shivering due to pleasure? Definitely want you to continue. You raised a lot of questions. Do answer them in further chapters. Keep it up.

I liked the first chapter, but the idea of a protagonist who gets out of a relationship after revealing a secret, albeit a big one, isn't interesting. He didn't give it a chance. Sharon might have wanted to stay with him. Put simply, he comes off as a prick.

I can't tell you how to write your story, but an unlikable main character doesn't make for an interesting sex story, or just a story in general. You're not a bad writer honestly, the character just isn't likable that's all. Maybe rewrite this chapter, start off with some dialog and give Leyton a plausible reason to leave at the start.

Like the previous commentators I think the story did a 180. The first chapter was good but this one just screwed it up, there is no logic to it. Yeah he can't read Sharon's mind to understand that she is fine with him being an alien, it should be a given since she didn't GTFO on him. Also he is a giant dick. Seriously fuck a girl and pawn her off on a cabbie? really? I would call this chapter a wash and redo it.

1star

Look, I know the people that commented seem to don't like your character, but I think they just don't understand what you were going for. He left the girl behind in the last chapter not because he didn't like her, but because he couldn't successfully mate with her. I don't see why everyone's getting so upset over this, especially since you've made it clear that he isn't wanting to have a relationship with anyone he can't have children with. Jeez, people need to calm down and stop being so critical.

So far, I enjoy your designs for the aliens, as well as the plot line and character motives you've put in. I would definitely like to see where you go with this, of you're willing to keep going with it. ^^

Girl bring back Sharon. This fuckboy status Leyton has now is not working out for him. Sharon seemed like a hella nice person in the prologue, dude; idk why you changed it. Then again, it's your story but it's gonna be pretty hard for you to make Leyton a likable character again after this

I agree with the others that this is a strange continuation. I can see where you are going with this with the woman not accepting him and wanting to find a mate but....it seems like a different story or like you forgot what you wrote in the prologue. Sharon didn't seem at all disgusted. You mentioned she had tons of orgasms and that his frigging slime was COLD which does NOT sound appealing btw I would have made it warm but it's your story. But anyways COLD slime surely he would be halfway intelligent enough to realize that would be uncomfortable as hell for a human. If she didn't accept him whytf would she just continue to curl up next to him and want breakfast and not run like hell...wth. Also, you should mention he like a sociopath , those are much more common and is exactly what you described. A pure psychopath is very rare and much MORE than what you described