All Comments on 'Alistaire Ch. 04: Carla'

Another cracker of a story

Great story! Just one little thing in the second to last paragraph. Shouldn't it be Carla rather than Bridget speaking?

A couple issues with this chapter. When they went to ask Bridget if she had a date, she suddenly became Brittany, and then at the end of the chapter, Carla became Bridget when asking Al to race. Just in case you want to clean up the official copy and maybe repost this one.

I am really enjoying these stories, but purely as an editing note, the character names need to be straightened out: Mary is Mary Davis in Ch. 1 but Mary Clark in Ch. 2, and Bridget goes back and forth between "Bridget" and "Britney" in Ch. 4 (and Carla is addressed as "Bridget" in the second last paragraph). Very much enjoying the quick release schedule, though!

Just read all four installations of the Alastaire story, and am rock hard! Well written, great character development, and I really like the "sub genre/nerd who discovers his sexuality and gift" theme -- really a turn on! Thanks so much for the great writing and stories -- I look forward to reading more of your stuff as time allows!

Hey, really loving this series! Was a bit confused for a minute on this one though, when Bridget became Britney. (I think that's what happened? Or am I still confused?)

Anyway, wondering if she or Sara will be next...

This story, All of your stories are great. Keep it up.

You are really good at individualizing your characters. And I'm surprised that my interest hasn't flagged.

Your work product would benefit hugely from the attentions of an editor/proofreader.

My favorite things about this story are; the well-defined characters, the dialog, and the varied, well-written sex scenes. 5/5*

I love this series and I think its the genuineness and likability of Alistaire and his unassuming adventures

Five more Stars for a continuously exciting story...

The sex-on-the-high-jump-pit-mat....an outstanding change-up to the other interactions between Alistair and his women, so far!!!! Makes for the anticipation of what is to come that much more delicious!

I see a threesome is next up; I really want Bridget involved; but see she is not!!?? "WHEN"...please??!!

💯🌠🌠🌠🌠🌠🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉

Lovin’ it! Seriously though, great plot idea that just a little confidence to start with can effectively be seed money to grow more confidence, which blended with some reality and a decent dollop of humility works wonders for the recipient and those around him. If only real life worked as well!

I was delighted and impressed at your character development, the ability to explore changes in Al’s confidence and sexuality while still maintaining the story’s progression. And glad for the change-up in situation and sex, which had started to grow somewhat repetitive. Love your writing and style.