by Tippycanoes
First: good job for your first story!! Second: PART 2!! Seriously this is HOT I can't wait for the next one!
I like it, slow it down slightly, maybe? Either make it so her arousal overwhelms her and then when she calms down she berate's herself or slow it down/make him more forceful. otherwise its a tad... unrealistic? or maybe less depth of plot/charactor would be a better way. Keep going, onto ch. 2 i go
JC
P.S. recoment if you want a proof reader/editor