All Comments on 'All Night Cafe'

not in the slightest bit sexy.

I really appreciate having comments about what I write. Could you be more specific about feeling the story is lame? What about the story did you find unsatisfactory or, perhaps more to the point what could any of the characters have done that would have made the story better? Please feel free to comment in detail. I find every comment instructional. Thanks.

Very nicely done ... looking forward to another chapter.

I hadn't planned another chapter, but I can certainly do that. I do have three more stories that are nearing completion. I'll be interested in everyone's reaction to those as well. My concern is that I take too long to lay the groundwork for the sex in the story. I neither want to delay that too much nor do I want to make the stories too long. I think two of Literotica's pages is plenty. Let me know what you think.