All Comments on 'All of the Above'

The story is very nice and quite erotic but some more character development and getting inside the heads of the character would make the story even better.

Appreciate your input! Liking the "quite erotic" part! I wrote this after a friend aroused the unbeknownst 'sub' in me. It was relatively easy to get into MY head but, you're right -- I need to delve into what HE would be experiencing. Wish I knew!