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"Were you planning to shoot me?" he asked her.
She glanced down to the pistol pressed between them against his heart. She snatched it away as he grinned at her ruefully. "Hi, baby," he said. "You're in quite a situation here."
"What were you going to do with him, Allender?" he asked, nodding toward the unconscious Parker.
"I was going to put an arrow between those other two, right in the center," she said.
"I can't let you do that," he told her.
"What are we going to do?" she asked.
"You two are going to start for home," Thomas said. "I'll clean up the trash. I'll be by in a couple of weeks. Will you both be there?"
Allender looked hopefully at Brian. He nodded.
"Come to Conconully," Allender said. "I think we need to get away from everything for a while."
Thomas nodded and watched his daughter and son-in-law disappear into the trees, one arm around each other and the sound of their low voices mingling and fading. He smiled. It was all going to work out.
They had gone perhaps a mile when they heard two shots. They looked at each other. Brian raised one eyebrow and Allender sighed. They headed down the trail.
- COMMENTS
Cracker27013 days agoI always enjoy this one. I stop by every now and then to reread it. As a longbow shooter and hunter I am very much aware of the errors in description. And as a beginning writer I know the importance in story flow. Always a five
nwaatntabout 1 month agoI think what Raines had done to him was over the top, Allender was as much to blame for what happened as he was.
They were both barely dressed to generate body to body heat, which is what they needed from what I have read.
Always going to be hard on both to not get aroused, she was an attractive woman.
She woke up humping his leg, he reacted.
From there she did nothing to stop him, she didn't do anything to stop the arousal going further , and she was fully aware what was happening, yet she did absolutely nothing to discourage him.
I think most blokes would be hard pressed to not get aroused with a nearly naked woman humping your leg.
As to him ringing her after he found they had separated is hardly cause to kill him.
She could have simply said "I told you not to contact me this is your last warning"
Anonymousabout 2 months ago; -) Sometimes sheep killin' dogs are alpha males that think they are entitled to take what they want. Even if not alpha males, sheep killin' dogs wind up bein' shot.
Phxray542 months agoRandi, going to have to think about this story a while. I can relate, except that mine never told me. I found out on my own. I wish it was a story. All better now. It took the love of another to make it so. A very well written story!
SplitGeode662 months agoWhat a powerful story! Well done. I had no problem with Allender hunting Raines. 5 stars.
Helen18993 months agoI am an animal lover, I don't mind violence to awful human beings, the 'Raine' character deserved everything he got. But what had the beautiful Elk done to deserve it's demise? , nothing she killed it for pleasure, she was no better the Raine and deserved the same ending.
steam6923 months ago2/8/24 To the anonymous of 24 days ago. You need to take remedial reading class,because you totally did not understand what happened. He raped her. Plain and simple. Just because her body betrayed her, and responded eventually, doesn't mean that she was consenting. And as shoprat pointed out in his comment, he had a responsibility to keep her safe. So by raping her she had every right to do what she said she would do if he ever contacted her. That she would kill him. End of story.
shoprat4 months agoThe story was excellent, and the violence was justified IMO. He had a duty to behave himself because she was dependent on him for her survival in that situation. He's in the role of an instructor in a high risk activity; it's an absolute no-no to take advantage of clients or students especially in a life or death situation. She was dependent on him for his skill and knowledge of the area to get out alive. The only way his behavior could have been any worse is if she had been underage. As it was, it was plenty horrible and he is certainly a rapist. Beyond that, he was an idiot. She told him exactly what she would do if he ever appeared in her life again, and he went right on and did it anyway regardless of the damage it might do to her. He completely deserved what he got.
Anonymous4 months agoNot sure why murder was warranted. It was definitely a gray area when it came to consent as she was in hypothermia and vulnerable. But she wrnt back to that well multiple times that night. And she reveled in the sex. I get rhat she had to tell Brian. And they needed time apart. And when Raines thought they were breaking up, he sought her out and his intentions were not selfish and nasty. But there is no clear evidence or intent rhat he was going to rape her. So why all the setup and the murder? By simply rebuffing Raines, she makes it clear, she doesn't give a shit about him and she is worried about her marriage. If the author wanted the murder part ot be more "justified" then make it nonconsensual but unprovable. It did not come off that way as depicted. Poor Brian. Felt bad for Allender until the murder plot. Then lost all respect for her. She had alternatives to redemption beyond murder. Those who think otherwise: seriously?
Fallschirmjager4 months agoTremendous story. Most of the LW stories are about loss with no redemption…..you have done really good work here!
