All Comments on 'Almost Sorry'

Sorry, I gotta play grammar nazi here, as two habits in both your stories detract/distract too much, keeping me from enjoying your tales as much as I'd like to.

First, you gotta stop bouncing between present and past tense. Easy to edit for dispassionately, especially if you work through backwards, ignoring content.

The other thing is, gerund phrases modify the subject, which you do correctly often, but then you modify the object. Example: "Smacking his disk on my mound, I could feel..." You weren't smacking it, he was.

Small things, but writing is so much better, and stories flow more smoothly into our thirsty minds when these details are handled properly.

Please keep writing and sharing, your stories are sexy and fun; just edit a little more tightly, and we'll be begging for more, and longer.

please another one!! This was amazing!

This is what I dream of my boss doing. So frustrating knowing we both want the other and not being able to satisfy the desire