All Comments on '"Aloha"'

Credit you with an effort at poetic debauchery.

Credit you with an effort at poetic debauchery.

Hahahah this is genius!

Atta girl! Nothing better than an ATM/swallow story from a female point of view.

Learn how to spell...

I hope you enjoy reading my stories as much as I enjoyed writing them. If my errors upset you don't read me again, simple, acting superior correcting small errors says more about you then me. They are not a legal brief constructed so every word is perfect, I have a tumbling out style writing from emotion, desire, writing fun erotica, fantasy. This is a hobby not a job my stories are free to all. I love the feedback even the harsh comments from the grammar police what would be helpful to acknowledge though is not only are some of these rules the grammar police hold so dear incredibly capricious, they're also constantly changing. The thing that is oft overlooked is that as language changes, as it naturally does over time, the rules that govern it should change as well. My stories are meant to be a fun ride for the readers spilling out of me emotion unedited raw

Volcano HOT poetry. More of that please……

while I realize this is fantasy, and admire her enthusiasm...some neophyte's might get wrong impression-successful rump rogering takes more than honey from a turned-on pussy...and ATM-ick!

I love the subject and I loved your way of telling it. Intense, warm, fun. Well done

Very sensual writing.

thank you very much for the nice comments they mean a lot

You have become a favorite author

All of the best blowjobs I've had included a finger or toy up my bum. Well done.