All Comments on 'Alternative Ch. 01'

Flipping/Flips? You never explained what they are properly. What is this "power" you're talking about? I read half of this chapter before stopping, because whatever explanations you gave up to that point were, like I said, way too confusing and vague. The near-constant swearing narration doesn't help one bit, either. If that's what you were aiming for, then fine, but don't expect anyone to be taken with this story. The vagueness and constant swearing is bogging the reader down.

It felt like I'd dropped into the middle of a chapter