All Comments on 'Alyssa Surprises Tom All Night'

The sex is too quick. Where's the foreplay, the buildup. Where's the kissing, the touching, the breast play (from both his and her perspective), perhaps some teasing, etc. It needs more than wham-bam-thank-you-maam.

The most erotic aspect of these stories is the seduction. The seen is simply set that these two had sex on her18th birthday. That's it? The rest of the story is boilerplate stuff. Seen it, read it a thousand times.

The title says it all

Much lamer than the first story. Eh.

sooo what happens next? also the title doesn't make much sense they didnt go all night still I'll give it a 3, but not one of my favorites