All Comments on 'Amanda and Sheri'

...but atrocious grammar and some spelling, (most noticeably "of" where you meant "off").

And I do not understand the current thing with "casual" American writers and their use of "off of"! No professional editor will ever allow that one to go to press.

You take a dress off, you get your keys off the bench, you take the lid off a jar. NO added "of" necessary or correct. It's simply bad, (slightly redneck), writing.

Although, I would've liked to see the uncle working with something bigger and Amanda having a bit of a time being able to get it all the way in for the first little bit. still hot though.

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