All Comments on 'Amanda Awakens – The Photoshoot'

I don't think that's how contract works, quite stupid actually anyway still plain garbage so don't bother writing another

Someone has been taking the works of others and using it in their own stories.1 star.

What church do they attend that allows them to fuck around and not feel even the slightest guilt?

I haven’t attended in many many years but it’s a little difficult to teach integrity, morality and monogamy while practicing the opposite. At the very least, she should be feeling intense guilt for sinning, for breaking her marriage vows and for disrespecting herself, her husband and her family.

But because there was none of that, I wonder exactly why they go to church?

Dr beulahthebrit, Loved it, Amanda enjoyed her starring role as did Logan, now its up to them to continue with their new life. More please and soon, would have given it ten stars if I could and swap places with her, only I wouldn't need the drink first, emm, all that cock and cum, yummy.

"To be continued..."...Really? Wasn't this bad enough? 1* (where are the negative ratings when we need them?)

Does the term "Death Knell" mean anything to you?

this was a rape

She's a sunday school teacher at the Church of Satan.

One of the hottest stories in a while, more more!

Sunday school teacher cloths? Can’t the whore afford any clothes? Just another POS story someone needed to be in LW. Just another cliche filled 7 page pile of garbage.

Good start, Go ahead.

Seven pages, no chapter number, and it's STILL not finished? One of the easiest ratings of 1.

It's amazing that there are always authors who dare to publish their terrible stories here! Actually, courage should be rewarded, but this is not about courage, but about good, exciting and entertaining sex stories. And you completely missed it!

Does this writer have any idea how big a 36dd chest is? Think a barbie doll. Most women hate having a chest that big and I would imagine no one knows the colour of her eyes.

Truly disgusting. Made me feel soiled just reading about this appalling husband.

Drugged and raped. Stupid despicable husband. No redeeming qualities whatsoever. Just the usual racist claptrap. 14 inch cocks or whatever rammed up her anus, would probably have killed her.

Hope this ends with Logan going back to the Studio and burning it down for raping his wife.

I'm not going to score this until I see the next part(s). I hope there is some intense

retribution visited on the photographer and his minions. Hope it is not just a" slut is born" tale. Otherwise it is technically well written and erotic. Look forward to more.

You fucking ruined this by drugging her. This needs to be in the Noncon category.

Holy stupidity batman!

Totally disgusting! As pleasant and erotic as a rotten fish.

You used “cloths” many times when “clothes” is the correct word. It is a “vial of liquid”, not a “vile”; the word is “lewd”, not “lude”. This whole mess is completely ridiculous!

Seven pages of stupid. That must have taken a lot of time and wanking.

Thanks for the effort.

No words for this *

The rest was drivel and filler. Not good.

WELL, I CAN'T COMMENT TOO MUCH CAUSE I GOT NAUSEOUS AND QUIT WHEN AMANDA STARTED TO GET FUCKED. LOOK, I LOVE WOMEN, I LOVE SEX, I LIKE STORIES (ALTHOUGH ON ACCOUNT OF MY PAST I FAVOR BTB) BUT IF I WERE IN A SITUATION WHERE DRUGS ARE INVOLVED I TEND TO FAVOR THE IDEA OF SHOOTING SOMEONE IN THE FACE...

BUT THAT JUST ME...

A bit much.

It's clothes, not cloths.

Brilliant, at least the first half was? Then just drivel before coming round at the end? Yes, will read part 2!

Just horrible, plain and simple

This is a re-hashed version of another story on here. Basically, the names were changed, and the photog was.changed to a man. Yea, it looks like maybe the original was expanded upon,, but geez, some of the dialogue is word for word......

This story had promise, but realised after a while it's very similar to another story I've read here. Some glaring spelling and tense errors too. Pretty obvious by the end she has 36DD tits and a diamond wedding ring - they're mentioned so many times.

Would read the next part (title of "Amanda Awakens" suggests this) but will need editing before posting.

Great start. Got us all waiting for what comes next. Maybe bring Jerome home for a fun weekend?

An erotic premise; not really explored much--- next chapter definitely is needed-- how much has the wife really changed? How much further will she go? Is the reference to the 36DDDs a lead in her being used more thereto - in that area & will tats be used there as well? And will the husband become a cuck? Well developed- very erotic-- please continue;

A brilliant 7 page story of a photo session with a naive couple learning how to experience huge black cock while being filmed. Amanda was obviously 'born' for cock and just waiting for a chance to break out , hubby watching and enjoying. I dont think the champagne had any thing to do with it, Amanda just wanted fucking. Hope there is a next part, but what, a bit of B&D perhaps?

Furriex

Pretty bad.

Other posters have enumerated the faults. I won’t read part 2.

I likes it, someone said it's like another story, well aren't they all. I liked the characters, he enthralled with beautiful wife and how he persuaded her to be photographed. She being on the conservative side was reluctant but eventually agreed. I think there are many households where that sort of conversation takes place. Husbands who love their wives are rightly proud of their wives. I liked the gradual progression , many writers rush to get to the juicy parts and the end. One commentator complains about her being drugged, don't know, it's not conclusively stated , more suspected. Anyway alcohol is a drug so when we give our wife or girl friend a drink, can we be accused of drugging her. Alcohol can be the source of lowering inhibitions, especially someone who rarely drinks. The more scenes Amanda did her confidence grew, and her natural sexual instincts gradually overcame her reluctance. Just a little further, little by little with each scene. The story clearly shows that the whole session was over quite a long period of time, the flattery and encourage from all present on top of the alcohol and her instincts i think the story is very plausible. Of course we can't forget the photographer and his assistants, he like any business man saw an opportunity to make money. His remarks to Logan shows he was unscrupulous. Finally the next morning Amanda does not seem perturbed or upset, she has gone off doing what she normally does on a Sunday. Surely if she was upset by the experience she would have stayed home and talked to Logan. Don't know, perhaps we will find out in the next chapter.

An excellent story from a new writer to Lit. The well-trodden plot of a boudoir photoshoot, is described with beautiful detail, culminating in a superb gangbang for our heroine. I look forward to reading further episodes as Amanda continues on the path to wantonness. I have read Ch. 2, and see it as a bridging chapter but please make the next epic as teasing as the first with increasing levels of Amanda's pleasure and pleasure-giving and Logan's loving support for her new desires. Two further points - firstly, it is important thsat Logan remains loving and besotted with Amanda's new direction, and is involved, but not as a 'cuckold'. And secondly ignore the right-wing nutters who always try to stop this website. They could not find their own erogenous zones in a darkened room with a flashlight! Keep doing what you are doing with pride and pleasure in your skills. I look forward to continue reading.

Rape

And you all seem happy with that

Drug induced sex is rape so good luck.....this bullshit interracial, and the husband just sat there while her arse was raped as well, even tho he had never been there. Now there will be some follow up turning her into a racist wife as she will only do black dicks............GARBAGE, put it in IR section, now LW

JJ

Utterly fantastic. Really enjoyed the slow warm up, the detail, the characters. What a great story, thank you for taking the time to put it together. Heading to Pt2 right away.

It is great story

As one of your previous commentors mentions,it was drug induced rape. Nothing vaguely erotic about it

Good for the first 4pages or so, but also a bit uneven and repetitive. It also went from erotic to pornographic, which I thought was unnecessary, but to each his or her own.

This was a pretty good story. Could it have been better? Yes. A good editor would catch the simple spelling and grammatical errors. If you’re going to invest this much effort into a story, then please have someone read it through before you post.

And now for some good advice….ignor the moron who posts all the hate filled comments. It’s one sad pathetic cocksucker who can’t get his tiny shriveled dick to work so he gets pleasure on trying to bully authors. You’re better than he is. And to stay better, simply delete those nonsensical comments and shut his cocksucking mouth.

This well-written story would have been much better of the main character had been single, and not an adulteress.

All I can say is I loved it.

I will look forward to their next adventure.

Wow!! That guy should get a life. Keep the stories coming please.

Very good work. I was thinking the couple would take 2-3 vista to reach the hard-core scenes. But a threesome felt a little too fast. But drugs and blackmail can justify. Good to have authors who can imagine great stuff.

Please post more new stories!

Aweful and clearly rape with drug use so contract illegal and therefore police should be called. But not gonna happen is it cos you and your supporters are sick fucks

JJ

I am not gonna lie, i got very hard thinking all of this was happening to my girlfriend. I had to finish myself off thinking she is filled by black men semen. Anyone want to chat about her or this scenario email me at bkforher@hotmail.com

Jesus, we get it, she has 36DD tits, and they're gorgeous, as you repeat at least a dozen times. Then throw in the racism and ridiculous 14" cocks, and it's completely off the rails.

There are some really stupid people in the world. To think you'd go to a porn site and get perfect grammar and perfect spelling in an amateur, erotic story site is preposterous. This is a great story as are all his stories. It sure takes you to an amazing erotic world that quite frankly I wish I had been in. It captured my attention all the way through. Thank you so much and I'm loving this Amanda. You are wonderful.

Excellent story. Would loved to have read of some kissing between Amanda and the men.....but otherwise a very enjoyable read.

Excellent story

Amanda has such beautiful and huge breasts! So I was really surprised that her lovers didn’t pay much attention to them. There should have been a lot more fondling, caressing, stroking, squeezing, kissing, petting, licking and sucking of her beautiful breasts.

And all of this should have happened before her lovers’ cocks got anywhere near her tight pussy.

Even during the penetrative sex, her lovers should have constantly played with her well endowed boobs.

A highly sexually charged story. Could have been hotter if the husband hadn’t been blackmailed into getting his wife’s pussy penetrated by huge cocks.

It could have been done more willingly. When the hubby was having second thoughts about his wife getting fully penetrated, Leanne should have played with Amanda’s nipples and murmured to her about how good the huge cock would feel deep inside her pussy. At the same time, Tony should have fondled Amanda’s clitoris.

So when Logan was refusing to continue the shoot, Amanda would have begged her hubby in a sultry voice to allow her to enjoy the huge cock. When Logan would have still hesitated (although with much less conviction than before), Leanne would have told him that anyway Tony’s cock has penetrated and stretched his wife’s pussy more than Logan has ever done. So Amanda’s pussy is no longer the pure and one dick pussy that it was an hour ago.

So a few more inches of Tony’s cock is hardly going to change anything. And besides his wife will immensely enjoy herself. So if he truly loves his wife, he should allow her to fully enjoy Tony’s cock. All of this along with Amanda’s sexy, pleading face telling her husband that she really loves him, while having a stranger’s cock embedded halfway up her pussy would have been too arousing for the hubby and he would have permitted his wife to enjoy the huge cock.

A wonderful story and a strong picture has formed on my brain of this episode. Thoroughly enjoyable.

I love it! Wonderful story told very well.

more is def not more,,and here i thought you were writing for adults,,,it was rolling along fairly well and then i had to laugh,,of course it was obvious she was going to get hammered by all and sundry but i just could not read ch 7,,,just so silly,,10 inch cocks, 12 and 14 inch black cocks,, "im a black cock cum slut" lololol,, it takes real talent to write below your IQ level..

olblueyes you haven't heard of fantasy and fiction apparently. You probably shouldn't read these stories.