All Comments on 'Amy's First Time'

It's not good, it's not bad, it just is. Saving the twist that they are related for the very end got old, tired, and cliched years ago and has lost an impact. Besides, how big of a twist can it be if the category states incest?

Amy- its nice and somewhat sexy; but to stand out in these pages you need more: hotter, dirtier or something special to make it stand out. I go for the hotter, dirtier, kinkier.

Incest stories should stir the "naughty/taboo" feeling

where is the begining you started in the middle of the story delete and start over and do it from the begining this time. you need to tell what thier relationship was like before this and tell about thier personalities also you need to tell what happened to make her cry at the begining of the story this should be chapter two of a series

THANK YOU!