All Comments on 'An Amazing Discovery Ch. 02'

ur story good.pls do write more. but, i would very like to if u wrote true stories.

as one other reader said to your in your initial installment: quotation marks are your friends; they make reading easier.

writing without quotes is an experimentation; countless have tried. it's just not very conducive to reading.

but the goal for telling a story is to convey, as clear as possible, what the story is, to the readership; you are not making a statement: I am experimenting and if you don't like it, screw you!

anyway, the story is very nice, with both siblings showing some reality-based awareness. keep it simple, innocent-ish, and don't drag it into group things, masodominitrix of whatever; many people write those stories and no more than a few read them.

remember that the genre/taboo is forbidden and, therefore, "exciting" enough, if written well. and so far it's been a good, simple, taboo story. keep it that way.

Sorry some of your readers are not smart enough to read without "---" marks. still a good story and good read!

great story,how come all brothers & sisters can't get along like that!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

More! More! MORE! This is shaping up to be a great classic story of brother-sister love! This story is building slowly, and it has "sometging to say". It isn't your run-of-the-mill "stroke fantasy" story.

The sibs are warm, and truly love each other. Either they will undergo a period of self-examination, like I did, or end up splitting up to marry others and be truly miserable. Like I didn't!

Keep This Cumming!!!!!!

Read the first one, was great except for quotations.

In this bran spanking new one it had everything! I'm can't wait for the next one.