All Comments on 'An Escape'

I thought that this was a good story, but it went too fast. The abrupt changes were distracting.

I think that there was alot there that was right, but it felt too rushed.

This might be a good story but I couldn't get past the first two paragraphs. There is no introduction. I guess, Carla is mature, since it has been "25 years of marriage and doing the same job". I guess she is some sort of teacher since she is looking out the window of "her classroom". You need to let us know instead of just jerking us down the path.

But slow down and lead into the story. Her friend Caitlin is apparently no longer "down the hall" if she lost a battle with cancer.

This needs work.