All Comments on 'An Unexpected Love'

Ryland took life the way a man should. Fortunately all the people that entered his life were supportive. I include his girl friend here. She uncomplicated his life by deserting TJ and him.

A well written story that here and there needed proof reading. I did want to hear more about that family.

Such a sweet story. Absolutely adored the emotion and love between your characters. Especially loved the little boy being so understanding and mature at the end. So good.

Wonderful charactors, I hope we hear more from them. Id love to hear how their relationship deepened.

u know wat i was lookin for some kind of nice sweet story....with love makin and not just plain old fuckin....and well never thot i wud find it on the gay page....but i did....and well its really beautiful.....really touched me....makes me wanna go and hug all the gay guys out in the world.....lol.....honestly great story and it had an amazin feel good factor

tia

i kept thinking this reminds me alot of 'shelter' and then you mentioned the film! obviously where your inspiration for this came from. well done with your interpretation though :)

Your story again proves that hate and bigotry are learned behaviours. I absolutely loved your story and the way you show the true beauty of unconditional love in your writing, it has truly touched my heart. As a mom with 2 girls and twin boys your story remindes me of what I always tell them, 'there is too much fear, hate, and uglyness in this world for anyone to condem a person for finding the pure bueauty of love, no matter in what form it come to them'.

I really loved this story! Great job and keep writing!

I love your story and when you mentioned shelter I went through the roof. That's my favourite movie ever! It's so good, right?

Anyways, I'm excited for this family. Thanks for the story.

aww :) so cute!!!

I loved this story!!!! It was so adorable. the relationship between rylan and jamie was sweet :) love at first sight .....,or love at first kiss rather

The story plot isn't too bad, but even before you mentioned Shelter, I was already thinking how much like it this sounded.

The grammar really spoilt it for me though. You rely too much on dialogues to get your story across, and it all feels very rushed. There's very little exploration of emotions in these 3 pages so even though they profess undying love or whatever, it feels rather perfunctory.

You rely too much on dialogue, and not enough on 'the rest'. Watch your characters' actions and body language. Try involving them in the environment a little. Try to get the characters to interact with each other and the world around them instead of just talking to each other. It's really important that you give the reader a clear and concise look at the world you are creating..... Just an opinion. Not trying to be a troll.....Just some friendly advice! Keep up the work

I like the idea you had for the story but it was very rushed and confusing. The time line was not very defined and it did not flow smoothly. The character development was poor and left too many unanswered questions. Not trying to just trash your story but it was hard to get through. You certainly have the creativity and ability. I suggest taking your time and maybe getting a beta reader in the future.

The Rev.

I like most of your stories, but this one is probably the best one. It was nice that he did not refuse love just because it came in the shape of a man. And good point about even a five year old being able to see that his dad was happier and how this was a good thing.

I thought this was a good touching story. I enjoyed the beauty in it. I do like stories involving gay romance. So much of gay porn and online stories seemed to be heartless "bang him" and move on type scenarios. I hope you will write more of these "men emotionally connecting with men" type of stories. Thanks for submitting this for us.

I enjoyed reading this story it is beautiful and very touching, brought a tear to my eyes, it was quite moving.

re-read this one and enjoyed it again. a sweet romance with an HEA

HOLY SHIT I LIVE IN SAN CLEMENTE, IM GAY, AND I SURF. THE GUY IN THE STORY PROBABLY WENT TO MY SCHOOL .