All Comments on 'An Unexpected Mating Ch. 02'

Darn it. Was that just a dream? I really want these two to get together. The story does read a bit easier now that you've identified who's speaking. I thought the story had good flow and pace. Look forward to more.

Having read this chapter I am relieved to see it is nothing like the story I mentioned. It was just your 1. chapter that had so much likeness, however if I find it again I will let you know. Very nice writing and a good storyline.

yeah, i figured out it was a dream almost from the first, story moving too fast otherwise

I really like your story, keep the chapters coming :)

I loved ch1. Ch2 was a little bit of a let down. Can't put my finger on why it didn't read as well as the first ch.

Maybe take a little more time as this ch felt rashed.

The dream sequence was good but the end was too predicable.

I would love to read more and really want to know what happens next.

Please keep writing

Its a good story, but for one the writing was a bit awkward and I felt you used the wird I a bit too much, try showing rather then telling. Otherwise I enjoyed it, poo for it being a dream! Lol keep it up!

You definitely need to keep the chapters coming. I would suggest finding a decent editor if you haven't already - as other comments have pointed out, your sentence structure is a bit stilted and you don't vary pronoun use very much. Having said all this, DON"T STOP WRITING!!!!! I will be waiting for the next installment.

Please please i need more omg this is the best story ever!!! i usualy hate vampire erotica cause its wellll predictable and tooo slow but your story has me squirming and throwing a tantrum like in 7again i want more ekkkkkk! XD

where is the rest of it. i almost gave up on finding a decent story on this site more

This is great!!!! Would really like to read more. PLEASE!!!!! Write more.

I have read it twice and love it!

THIS IS F*CKING AMAZING!!!!!!!

Please PLEase PLEASE keep WRITING!!!!!

Oh man.... I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

You are one of the best writers I ever read in the top ten!!!!!!

YOU NEED TO FINISH THIS OR ID CRY DX

are you ever going to put people out if their misery and finish this story? it's such a great beginning. it deserves a great finish. hope to see the rest some day.

I appreciate everyone and their comments and a little stunned that people are liking it. Thought it wouldn't go over well. I will be having an editor from now on and will work even harder to make things good. Again, thank you for the patience you all have exhibited and hoping to have chapter 3 as soon as possible. Thanks.

BatmanChick - The Return LOL!

Can't wait for more!!

FINISH THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!PLLEEEAAASSSEEEE

how can you sleep at night knowing your public are demanding more. A great start that could become a 40 chapter story. Please, pretty please can we have some more.

from yr number one fan . great writing by the way.

simon

That was hot! im begging for more please.

Please continue with this story. Can't wait for the next chapter

PLEASE ! YOU HAVE GOT TO MAKE THIS INTO A VEEEEEEERY LONG RUNNING SERIES !!!!!!!!!!!!!! PLEAAAAAAAAAAASE !!!!!!!! THIS IS SOOOOOOO GOOOOOOOD !!!!!!!!!! THANK YOU FOR WRITING IT !!!!!!! PLEASE HURRY UP AND WRITE THE NEXT CHAPTERS !!!!!

PLEASE MIGHTY BATMANCHICK IT HAS BEEN SOOOO LONG PLEASE CONTINUE THE STORY!

It is so hard to find good storys like this please at the very least finnish it. Please

Because I asked nicely :3

I love this story so much. I have been waiting for the next installment for 2 years. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE finish this story. It's so good!!

I hope there is more to come. You so cannot leave this story the way it is.....