All Comments on 'An Unexpected Reaction'

Read it before read it again ..still brought tears to my eyes ..good job

I almost didn't make it past the first page, because it was pushing some unwanted buttons for me. But I'm glad I kept reading. The first half was a necessary background to the payoff at the end.

To the people who seemed to miss the point of Amanda grabbing his nuts, That was a hint of the old Amanda coming out. The reason for it was he lied to her about who Becky was. I am sure her first instinct was to kick Beck's ass. As much as Jace was for honesty , he lied and down played Becky's place in his past. I am sure he felt it would be better, but he still lied. Think of as her version of the her ass being spanked in the rain. To the author, loved the story and I don't expect professional writing, but love a good story. You did a great job!

some paragraphs I had to take time to figure out who was speaking, a name might help

I've read this multiple times - loved it every time. The same can be said about so many of Q's stories. 5 stars!

somewhere east of Omaha

Another fine story by a good author. This could as well been placed under the romantic heading also.

To the guy who posted a reply just recently, I can see that you're def a bitter person and probably unmarried for a reason. I do agree on the ball squeezing; that was just illogical and unfair. Amanda definitely lost a few points from me my first time through. Just excessive. That bit of writing was very stupid to me. But divorce? That easily? Sometimes I wonder why you people bother getting married in the first place. And yeah, there is certainly a double standard no doubt.

About the brother and Becky, by all rights, they should be in prison. But Jace isn't that type of person. He isn't as vindictive as you are. He still had love for the woman. I do agree with the sentiment against bullies and abuse of authority, though.

There was definitely a very "women are like this and men are like that" vibe from the story.

Still enjoy it

Several issues in order:

Should have not taken Becky back after the first lie (man in the bar).

The realtor was sexist and disrespectful twice-I would have fired her.

Becky and her cop brother would have been in prison for a long time, or I would make it my life’s mission to ruin the police, DA, and judge. Expose the bias and corruption to the media. I loathe bullies. Abuse of authority is one of the most vile sins that exist.

Amanda grabbing his balls = assault charges and divorce. WTF double standard bullshit! If a man grabbed his wife’s breasts or vagina with enough force to cause her to almost pass out, then threatened amputation of those parts, everyone would want him killed! But if a woman does it, then that’s okay?

Fucked up, man...

Great story. Was looking for sex but the story was so good I couldn't put is down.

Easily the best story I have read in a while.

Did I comment on this before? Can't remember... Never mind...

Just read it again, and I have to be in the mood for a Loving Wife's story, but this one still stands out to me as the one all the other should be measured by.

As good, if not better the second time around.

my anonymous friend.... he explains why it would not have worked.

how could he keep going whitout trust? how could he be sure she wouldn't do it again? and even if she granted full acess he would remain suspicious, they may have reconciled, but it would be a miserable marriage.

and to explain why we don't see the reason becky cheated, or if she got therapy, i'll explain one basic element of writing:

the narrator (AKA the P.O.V.)

you can have three types of narrators, the internal/partial/personal narrator, the external/impartial narrator and the omniscent narrator.

the mid one is most used when telling a story about someone else, like in a biography

the last one means that the one who narrates the story knows everything happening, everything a charachter thinks and feels in every moment and every place

and last, the personal narrator, the one of the story, this means that the one who tells the story is a charchter in it, and knows only what he felt and what he did, everything else is unknown to him unless someone else tells him, so maybe becky got therapy, maybe she became a better person, or maybe keept thinking that her error wasen't such a big deal

I skipped after page 6 when Jace stopped going to see Kathy, his therapist. This is a great well written and well crafted story but I felt that Jace should have reconciled with Becky. For all her faults she did really love him but his own personality and ego let him down. During Jace and Becky's session with Kathy Jace asked how he could ever trust her again. But the author doesn't address any of these as options in the story. Jace could have had Becky sign a post nuptial agreement so that if she cheated again she would walk away with nothing. Becky could have said that she would accept Jace having access to her phone, emails etc. The story doesn't explore why Becky cheated on Jace there's no mention of therapy for her. The author obviously wanted to take the story in the direction of a failed marriage when it could so easily have been a reconciliation story.

Holy shit this was a good story. Goosebumps for sure holy cow. 5/5

You have a knack for writing stories that refuse to let me stop reading them until I have finished it. Your character development is always top shelf and I frequently have trouble seeing for a few minutes from time to time. I guess it must be my allergies that cause my eyes to tear up. This is one of a couple of stories that I read when I get really down, on my self, on people, and on the world in general, and while it hasn't saved me from doing something "crazy"...yet, it helps me to stay sort of above water.

give me more good shit fam. 5/5

Enjoyed it ! Really starting to enjoy your stories this being third or fourth keep up the great work another 5

I read multiple times. One of best.

You really make this story sing. If there were any mistakes, I did not see any.

One of the best stories on here. Thank you!

It stunned me how Amanda literally evolved from a street urchin into a raging beauty!

Only read it twice

A long time ago I read it and just reread it and it's still good. I didn't hurt to know most of the story in advance. I was also going to read my original comment, but with 603 comments I wasn't about to plod through them to find mine. Somehow the new system allows me to rerate the story and I gave it a 5*. That probably hasn't changed.

Like others I have read this story at least five times. It is one of the top 10 loving wives stories on this site, maybe the best. It shows the best a man can be without concentrating on his virile nature. Many thanks to the author and his body of works. You are a better person than I am!

Fantastic story and as good to read the 25th time as it was on the 1st time

Very good story! Thoroughly enjoyed this read. Thank-you

why he didn't have the cop brother-in-law and soon-to-be-ex-wife prosecuted for kidnapping. Granted, he wants to be done with her, but that's just being too nice. Their actions were a crime.

That was a wonderful story and I'm so glad I found it. I can't wait to read anything wise you've done.

Great Story . But I did not like the ending

This is a realy good story so much so that I read it again. Thank you for your time and the story

This is a remarkably well written story that explores the dynamics in multiple relationships, some that endure and some that end. Nine pages of reader satisfaction are brought to an abrupt halt by the conclusion of the story. It is ridiculous for Amanda to be anything but pleased by and grateful for what Jace says to Becky at the awards dinner. Instead she feels threatened by his contact with his ex-wife, a clear indication of problems involving her self-esteem and her belief in their marriage. That is worrisome at this point in their relationship.

The fact she feels entitled to cause him physical pain by squeezing his testicles is an outrage. Jace made a serious mistake by not calling out her assault and rejecting her overall reaction to the event. It might be instructive for him, while smiling of course, to painfully twist and pull on her nipples the next time she disappoints him. I doubt she would see it as playful teasing. Indeed, she should not.

I have read a lot of Loving Wives stories (A LOT). This is the only one which made me cry.

You did a great job. I like the beginning and the growth of your character. I believe I have now read it 3 times and still like it.

this is the fourth time im reading this story. still love it.

The story is very good, there's a great mix of romance, revenge and hate all over. But the ending part is a little bit let down. Amanda seems to forget who takes and made her. Definitely a five star rating.🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

This time the imagery in my mind was in full living, breathing, spectacular color. You have a way with words. Sometimes incredibly tender, then bawdy, then spectacular.

This was two great stories in one. Absolutely wonderful.

Thank you for sharing!

Was the ball squeezing the unexpected reaction ? :)

Hated the ball squeezing at the ending! Squeeze a man's balls for no reason, why wasn't she kicked to the couch for a few nights?!

You are a great writer!

Thank you for the SUPER story!!

One of the best stories that I've read!

Absolutly amazing! Nothing more needs to be said. I would give this 10 stars if I could.

Good job expressing the vitriol. Hope it wasn't from experience.

I don't think it is too big a compliment to say you write a good story. The plot, the characters, with their ups and downs of life that we all experience. I feel I already know Jace, which is to down to the way you write. That ,and the belief that we all want to be the person 'that does the right thing'

The say that there is a book in all of us, it is definitely in you. Good luck.

I gave it a five. It was a very good read, but, it really should have been two stories, I think. My one objection to the plot is, why he didn't find out why. He wouldn't speak to her, listen to her messages, or have any other communication whatsoever with her. For, he was too severe.

American fries up North and they need to be sliced thick the same way fries should be. Not that thin sliced, shoestring crap and yes, fried. I wasn't too impressed with the rest of the new menu in general either but it's my only disagreement with this fine piece of work. Signed: BTW

I appreciated how much life experience was woven into this submission. The plot is unique enough to be considered for development into a movie script. As one who went through divorce as a result of my wife's infidelity, I appreciated the way Jace dealt with the experience...not because I responded with the same detached coldness, but because I understand the need for emotional self protection that comes when a person experiences such intimate betrayal. This story is a gem.

Soooooo much wrong here, as far as storytelling goes ...

(1) Too much emphasis on Jace and his Big Man ego. I was pretty unimpressed by his robotic, methodical, hard-ass response to the whole thing. (And what kinda douchebag goes by "Jace"?)

(2) Why the references to the "evidence" (the red folder, the video, the DVD) if we're not going to see what they actually contain? If the author is gonna introduce a plot device, then develop it, for Chrissake.

(3) Same thing: How exactly *did* Becky's friends assist her and conspire with her? How difficult would it have been to give us examples? If you're going to reference that point more than once — as if it's especially important — then DEVELOP it.

(4) "Part 2" (what should have been Part 2) had no conflict, no commensurate resolution and hence no redeeming value. Reading that constituted a small piece of my life that I can never get back.

Two stars. Pass on this one.

Very refreshing turn about from most of the stories out there

Thanks again

Very well-written! I always love when the story is expanded upon and deals with the ramifications of a breakup rather than focusing on the breakup itself.

One of the best stories on the site. Definitely in my top 15.

Thank you for a great story.

I still believe that any story so good as to warrant multiple readings warrants bonus stars . . .case in point! If Q could write a little faster maybe I would't be reading this for the third time. Thank you for your stories!

I like how the cheating wasn't really a focus of the story and instead emotions and effects were. Other stories tend to go in cuck territory with the number of passages devoted to that...

The ending was funny, I was unsure why he wouldn't tell Amanda that Becky was his ex-wife but maybe he wanted to avoid the awkwardness. Loved that ending.

This is absolutely one of the BEST stories on this site. Not just Loving Wives, but ALL of Literotica. It made me think of something a student said to me once: "Age, is just a number." I have to admit that I was pulling for Amanda from the moment she was introduced into the story. Hope she got her girl. But, don't squeeze the boys...not fun at all.

This was a good story. Did not like the last section where she squeezed his boys. NOT good! NOT cool! NOT what a loving wife should do!

An absolutely fabulous story keeping your attention for all 9 pages and rooting for Jace throughout. One of the great writers here and always a delight to read. Loved the reference to Betty Bang Bang Burke.

I read and re-read this master piece several times because it's so good. Still one of the best LW stories ever written! Qhml1 is one of the most amazing authors on Literotica. Please finish your "Rocky Racoon" story.

Some of the finest writers ply their stories at Literotica, Qhml1 is certainly one of the best! Thank you and others like blackrandl1958, hooked1957, oshaw, and JPB just to name a few for years of entertainment. This story IS one of the best.

One of the best stories on this site. Qhml1 you are one of the best writers out there. Please continue your work. Thank you.

A lot of stories are too long I’m not complaining about this one. A lot of information is needed for this story to work and work it did.

I used to live near a woman who played on her hubby he must have taken her back 4 times, In the end she got pregnant by another guy so he finally woke up and dumped her.

This may be just a story but there is a lot of truth in there as well especially in these modern times because the generations now seem to hold no value in marriage vows and certainly don't seem to have any real love for anyone other than themselves.

Jace got what he deserved for taking Becky back after she went out with another guy, dancing with his hand on her ass, kissing him and lying to Jace about it. I found it hard to be have any sympathy for him or to identify with him after that.

Great, great story. Great job!

And a nice, hot sex scene...that was well written. Really enjoyed it. Will have to get my wife to read it.

Looking forward to reading some of your other stories.

THANK YOU FOR AN EXCELLENT STORY!

The threat to his manhood at the end was totally unnecessary as he didn’t initiate contact with her and had no idea she would be there.

To think there are woman like Becky in real life is scary...a woman like that can turn a man into a cuckold. Anyways great story i enjoyed it.

Such a wonderful and loving story. It was well written with a great story line, and then the happily ever after. Well done, 5 + stars.

One of the best stories. Not only was the writing excellent, but you are a master story teller.

This is a great story, a bit longer than I expected, but certainly worth the read. Have got exactly what he deserved, a happily ever after life, but Becky deserved to suffer a more fitting fate.

Love it!!!!!

Very good writing and a feel good story,more romance than loving wives which is good. Keep writing.

Just read this again. It is still a really good yarn and I enjoyed it even better!!! Thanks for penning this one!!!

Becky was a selfish cheating Cunt from the beginning and he knew it, so he should have suffered more for his mindless choice to take her back and then marry her. He should have just killed himself at that point. It was an okay recovery but no pain for Becky. She just found an even bigger sucker. Glad he ended up with Amanda. And wow! He had some real spineless friends. Nice to read how he just cut them off. I did think it was a little long winded with too much detail on meaningless things but overall an okay story.

I really loved the story.. BUT...it really erks me that you authors write your protagonist with intelligence and maturity EXCEPT when it comes to relationships!

This is the best story I've ever read on literotica. Absolutely awesome.

I want to begin by saying there's a great story. You gave enough detail so you knew what was going on but you didn't give too much he got bogged down in the details, good writing. Don't quit keep going.

About the subject: trust and commitment

that is one thing people don't focus on anymore or commitment when you commit to something.

Overall it went the way I thought it would or hoped you always hope that they get back up on their feet move forward some can't some never do

the husband: I feel he had every right to do what he did she broke the trust and the commitment of the wedding bells and not only once but twice. His friends were not as friends they were as guilty as she was for perpetrating a fraud

the first wife: she deserved everything she got and more she relied on friends to cover for her cheating but more than once and she had no trust or commitment everything that came out was about her not them example 'I will do anything' I've heard that so many times

Headbutting the service it had to come home my six-month deferment to take care of his cheating wife and then fly back overseas the finishes three year commitment wasn't going to month and she had five lovers BITCH

I feel anybody that you cannot trust further than arms reach or is not take a commitment like marriage vows very seriously is not worth the other person's time the cheater should be treated just like he did cut it walk away is one thing get away with it will always come back

Your writing style is great I love it keep writing and don't let anybody put you down because it's not them that matters it's only you are you happy with what you're doing and if you are keep doing it put words on the page to make a story

Great story. I'm a grown man (66) married 45 years to an angel. Everyone in this story got what they deserved. Keep writting.

Big mistake.

Keep writing like this with a touch of positivity and love.

I usually don't read 'loving wife' stories. I hate cheaters, and most of the stories I've seen in this category are more cuckold, or cheater wins type stories and I hate that. I stumbled onto this one from the similar stories at the end of a romance story I read. I'm glad I gave this a chance when I saw the category, Nice job, and thanks for sharing.

One of the best Loving Wives category story. If I was Jace, I would react differently. I would hurt every each of them. Actually, in my real life, I don't trust anyone. Because everyone who is around me does it for their good. No one ever thought about me yet. Even my ex-girlfriend. But if I ever had a girl like Amanda, who does love without exceptions, it would be my life-changer. Still struggling. Maybe single forever. Men, you would have urges, and even fantasize about other girls/woman. But don't ruin a happy life. And woman, don't destroy yourself.

Thank you for writing this!

Keep Writing you have a beautiful way with words you have a great knack for telling a story it flows like a quite babbling brook slow and steady you keep turning the page and hoping it never ends

can't wait for the next story ;)

mistakes, I didn't see any, so they weren't serious or noticeable. what a story, im 60, had tears in my eyes a couple of times, I know there are people out there with very similar circumstances, great story indeed.

I thoroughly enjoyed this. Keep up the good work.

This was beautifully crafted. I am going to search your stories to see if you gave Aida and Robert a story of their own, but if not, I hope you consider it. I wish I had the patience to learn to spin yarns this well. I enjoy your writing. Thank you for sharing.

I usually feed these stories for the strong sexual content. This one read like a novel and is far more than a prurient read.

to write an LW story without all of the usual LW plot cliches. Some writers wite and plot badly. Others write well, but resort to tired tropes and cliches for the plot. Only a few write well and take the time to come up with interesting, novel plots. This is one of the best of LW.

i seem to post comments about rubbish stories and (sadly) authors but regularly read this story again to remind myself of the hidden gems that are occasionally submitted for our perusal

Just brilliant. Read it in one go, it's 4am, and I can finally go to bed.

Perfect in every respect.

H

Loved the story, gave it 5 stars

First part was a good story, a bit of a downer throughout but great setup for the second half.

Second part I was so into that I completely forgot about Becky, Aida, Allen and Cindy.

Finished strong, I would've liked to know what happened to Allen and Cindy, also maybe a rekindling with Sandy and Tina.

I just finished my 4th read. Never gets old. Love it more each time. The Bear approves.

The BEAR

Never stop writing!!!!!

on this website.

He told his boss that his sister shorted it from JC to Jace what happened to the sister he said mom always wanted a daughter well I thought she had one the only problem I have with the story it was awesome other than that.

Read it again and it is as good and entertaining as the first time.

He could have been kinder to first wife. I don't know of a real excuse for a cheating spouse but I do believe in forgiveness. Then there is trust! Also he would not have met his second wife.

Good story and well written.

A story of two parts... not entirely sure the second part was needed, except if you really need a happy ending.

I liked the male protagonists reaction to betrayal. I much prefer it to the vengeance espoused in many other LW stories. Move on as quietly and smoothly as possible should be the watchword, and dropping any questionable 'friends'.

Well Done

Great plot devices to accomplish what never happens in divorce cases in real life. So much betrayal in this world gets simply rewarded, using the husband as the forever ATM cash device. Great that the plot had jail time legal leverage to accomplish an uncontested divorce.

With private investigators, good LEGAL video footage and Good Laws, ( I think Massachusetts of all places still has divorce for infidelity and adjusts the payout to the unfaithful spouse ... where the money is concerned this is really a business partnership, as such each partner can assume unlimited liability for the partnership with joint liability, i.e. debt. ) the faithful spouse can cut the bond and not get hammered financially for the rest of his life.

Things happen. Divorce happens, a lot. Better to bankrupt yourself temporarily with private investigators than to be a financial slave to somebody else's new chosen lifestyle. Probably why there are divorce law practices focused on strictly the man.

So this is a 5 star story in a not really vengeful -btb- genre, that accomplishes With good character development and plot devices, what most men never get in divorce proceedings. When a high status male gets betrayed and it's ugly, it's nice to read a story where things worked out for him.

Well paced and a satisfying read.

Some parts I felt were elongated but I enjoyed it!! would love to read similar stories like this

I read the story a second time. Nothing unique, but well done, and I enjoyed reading it the 2nd time as much as the first. 5-stars.

Of course this is in my favorites, as are you. I guess I sound like some fanboy, but I’m 73 years old (yikes).

Thank you

W

Good story however it mentioned he had his name Jace because his sister couldn't pronounce his name right then his mom says always wanted a daughter one of the few inconsistencies other than that it's great story, well I thought the Becky Part rolled on a little bit too long but other than that good story.

The first 3-4 sentences were so chewy, I didn't go any further.