All Comments on 'An Unlikely Romance Ch. 03'

No... No.... No No No No....

You did the apostrophe mistake! Twice!

:(

Also, I think you put the thought about two girls to make a point in unnecessary quote marks. Since he's thinking it, and not saying it aloud or to anyone else, it can do without the quote marks.

Still an excellent read. But please don't perpetuate the horror of the "it's" mistake...

You have me where you want me - anticipating the next chapter.

Another great chapter. A few small grammar things that fell through but nothing glaring.

I am going to go back and read the 1st Ch because there is one thing I'm having trouble with but before I say it I want to see if I missed it in the beginning.

Can't wait to see what's next.

I love the details here about the sick fan page and also the paranoia leading to a beating. Nice touches that add verisimilitude.