All Comments on 'An Upper-Cut to the Jaw'

Cheaters shouldn’t get together in NC, we still have the, rarely used but still effective, alienation of affection law. Great story SG.

Five stars easily

Another good read, but I agree that the last paragraphs left for something. I don't see a reason to introduce concepts in an epilogue and not even give them more than a sentence. I guess we're meant to understand that Jillian is irredeemable and plows through husbands. But that wasn't how her character was developed. She was a fatally flawed but otherwise loving wife and good mom who cheated like clockwork every three months. And the dynamic with Mickie was introduced and just as quickly he was with her sister. So the ending felt unresolved as per the rest of the story to me. Also, you really didnt need the line about filling the whole house with unflushed shit, especially since it didnt come into the story otherwise. Cheapens your writing.

Nothing special in this story. Also just another bitch daughter not believing her mother is a cheating skank but it was her money being wasted

An usual cheating tale, nothing out of the ordinary, nothing spectacular. And it's a bit confusing why, after all the months of fucking, Mickie suddenly realises that Chris wasn't right for her. No reason given.

It was an ok story but I like a little more sneaking around, discovery and retribution, but that's just me and I'm dead set against no-fault divorce.

Great story. The ending got a little confusing because you never told us why she went through so many husbands. Also, why was Micky sobbing when she was on the phone talking about her sister?

Other than those minor things, great job!

Started out ok but then dissolved into a mess. Not up to SG's normal standard.

Just the usual cheating bitch tale with nothing really different in it apart from a Nurse by education whatever that is.

"If I had learned that any of our children weren't mine, you'd be in the trunk of my car right now and I'd be driving to Vermont to bury your corpse in the middle of the woods."

That’s what he should’ve done regardless!

ZK

A 5, until the last two paragraphs!

Fluidswallower had it over all the hard-of-understanding critics. Most excellent five star tale.

Thanks for a well-written, thoroughly enjoyable read!. Well done!!

Grandma slut haha the shoe fits. Great story 5-stars.

Good one. Enjoyed the initial ambush muchly as I did the succinct ending. It was all that need be said.

OK but the ending was very weak. Wifey was told there might be a way back to her daughter and sons if she straightened herself out and became the woman her adult children needed her to be. I don't think that getting married three more times in about a 6 or 7 year period would do anything other than guarantee her children would have little or nothing to do with her. It strikes me that portraying her as a completely unrepentant slut is the lazy way out. There is a formula in too many stories that the husband ends up finding the love of his life after being cheated on and the cheating wife turns into a promiscuous over the top slut.

At least occasionally, it might be interesting to show the wife making an effort to straighten out and get back into her childrens' lives rather than just writing her off as grandma slut. That said, it is still a solid 4**** for good writing.

An ordinary that sucked.

Pregnant women should not drink. Ever hear of Fetal Alcohol Syndrome.

Other than that not the greatest I have read on literotica but not worst. A solid 4

Don't understand some of the comments.This was just a run of the mill mundane story.

Haha.

Anony said "A pregnant woman is drinking"

Under the circumstances... yup.

One glass of wine is not going to result in poor birth weight in a 7th month of pregnancy

And he didn't ruin the financial future of the asshole's children, they'll be fine, idiot. Besides that, he didn't ruin his financial future at all. The asshole did that himself. He got whatever he had coming to him.

And anyway, don't forget who informed hubby. I don't think hubby would have made the slightest difference to the asshole's outcomes at all... At all.

Dear anony, I think you're projecting your own ethical leanings in your comment.

Any other misguided ideas you can blame on the betrayed hubby?

With your perspective, you wouldn't know a great story if it kicked you in your gender reassignment.

Damn. I love the stoicism you wrote into his character for the confrontation.

No gnashing of teeth, no emotional fragility at all.

He just destroyed her with direct observation and truth.

The way a real man should handle it.

Just in case HighBrow hasn't read this story, I'll relay his ubiquitous term...

Femdom Agitprop.

And I'll preemptively reply.

Bullshit.

It’s always so weird that a lot of LW writers do a last minute who-wil-be-the-next-wife substitution, usually with someone less desirable than the current girlfriend.

Freaking weird.

The list of husbands, right at the end, was perfect. Nice job.

One of my favorites. Perfect bitch roast.

A pregnant woman is drinking.

He's going to financially ruin a man who has little children.

Other than that, it was a run of the mill loving wives story.

Well paced. The "cheated ons" didn't get ruined forever. There was a upbeat ending for those that deserved it. 5*

Best story on lirotica.

Everyone got what they deserved. Our faithful man got to find his true love and marry her. The unfaithful woman cant keep a man satisfied and is on her fourth marriage.

anon feminazi shitstain from 19 days blames the man for the bitch cheating can fuck off. jillian is a vile woman that cheated for years and thats on her. small penis because jillian cheated? is the dumbest thing ive heard, big dicks get cheated on too. and alienation of affection lawsuit is a good way to get paid for having a whore for a wife, and remember her lovers wife filed too for divorce and alienation of affection lawsuit so is she a cuck from 18th C slave owner that told everyone she cant satisfy her man?

Being a good wife and mother are two separate things. No one criticises the dad for wasting his weekends drooling over men passing an out of shap ball around a field. Or the time and money spent going to watch them live, often while trying to indoctrinate his kids into this perverse lifestyle of unrequited homosexual love for manchilds. Or fishing or perhaps worst of all rebuilding lame old cars from his past. No, no one generally equates that with cheating, but aside from the sex aspect it bloody well is.

Story was great up until the cuck told everyone about his small penis and inability to satisfy any woman ... yeah that's right, he started to cry about alienation of affection lawsuits like some 18th C slave owner.

Agreeing with the anon below me, writing needs improvement. Commas not where needed, pur in where not, words cut out. I thought StyleGuy's a better writer than that.

The movement between the double date & marriage went light speed = rushed. Could've spent a bit more time on it, especially with him & Jan. However, the line at the counsellor's office "We make great kids... but...." was classic, & maybe the best part of this story.

After getting his evidence, he waited a bit too long to have serve the divorce and other papers. Why that need and eventually the play of faking sex? In her confrontation, not sure that his daughter should've had that wine while pregnant. It leads to the belief that she, even moderately, drinks during that time.

Also enjoyed but I again felt things went too fast (no talk between him and his ex at all?) was that she had a new husband for each year or so. HA!! But no explanation.

2** for this story. The small parts that were liked doesn't come close to overcoming or neutralizing the failed parts. gr

2 stars, which's a crime. Should've been more. But you cut or eliminated words, switched from past to present tense in the same sentence, & even misspelled some words' sometimes I had to read again to figure out what you're saying. I stopped about 2/3 of page 1 as I couldn't continue without risking a migraine. You desperately need a proof reader. Moreso, it's obvious you never read your story before posting. Bob

Still should have put her in the trunk...

G

Oh so to the point, nice hard hitting pay back, a nice litter twist to the end.

Four stars. Seven month pregnant Tracey should not have drunk any of the wine in that glass.

JPB

Loved the title. Absolutely loved last 2 paragraphs. Funny. Thanks.

WOW! Seriously slutty bitch. Loved the fact that her daughter confronted her at dinner with her lover.

Good riddance to the slut Jillian

Jillian sounds like my second ex-wife, who has had 5 marriages & 2 live ins.

It started well with the daughter ripping the mother and lover boi several new ones. FYI: It is Bawling not Balling.

Then it dropped after reading how father and sons had a crying jag. Real men don't cry over cheating slut wifes/mothers.

Then it fell apart even more with the weak ending.

Why do you And many other authors let stand the cliche???

She was a slut But a good mother!!?

Showing lying for years okay as long as you don't get caught and then downplaying the lies and breaking vows and stealing time from family . Mentally and emotionally distanced from family while with other cheater and also while planning your get togethers etc

The perfect ending would be for Jilly to spend her life without any contact with her ex-husband or her children. As she got older she was found in a crack house dead with a large needle in her arm. Her father's firm at the time was being led by her husband and his son.

Totally wrong ending ... the real ending had him going to a gym where he discovered he was gay and that was why he'd been emotionally distant from his wife for the past 10 years and why she'd been forced to find comfort in the arms of a real man.

If you have proof of betrayal, why hide it? There’s too many stories where the MC won’t show his children what their mother did, or even tell them. Do they think they are being noble or kind? It’s not noble or kind to hide the truth.

I won’t be questioned. If I tell you something, it’s the truth. If you don’t believe me, I’ll prove it to you, but our relationship is over. The daughter basically called her father a liar. He should have disowned her for it!

ZK

okay but too many marriages for Jill, LOL

I gave it a “5”. My only thought here is, WHY do so many wives cheat and get caught, then refuse to give the husband a divorce? You do the crime, you do the time...

vanye

The answer to your question is that some women do. Usually as in the instance here is is only a few sips. But in clutures where wine drinking is the norm at meals it may well be a whole glass.

I'm not concerned about the rights or wrongs, just know that some women do.

If Jillian was a motorcycle, she'd be a HORELY-Davidson. Must be all of her other husbands found out she's a slut, and that's why she had so many more husbands. Too bad she didn't get an incurable disease...

Decent effort, for sure. But c'mon... every man knows, a husband never wins in a divorce. The courts ensure he loses bigly. I guess this IS a work of fiction. 4 stars.

Why was a pregnant woman drinking wine, in this day and age?

Way too much. People don't just fall into two categories, the black hats and the white hats.

Am I the only one who grows weary of LW betrayed males who cry (bawl in this case), puke on cue, run away, delete text messages and voicemail (Who knows what incriminating thing the cheater will declare or admit to in a text/VM?) and get drunk fallin' down, blind, weeping drunk (always on proudly declared designer spirits)? This was a great story, with minimal silliness and maximum readability.

The story was nearly perfect, except for Tracy's over-the-top approach. Better than the pregnant, hormonal, wailing banshee would've been the quietly smoldering, angry, and classy outraged daughter. Strength born of righteous indignation destroys more assuredly than angry, expletive-filled taunts. Great story, and you used dialogue to show and illustrate your points to the reader. The best example was the fact that the insurance company built its training center in North Carolina, where AoA lawsuits are still allowed.

Decent effort, but as others have already mentioned, to many loose ends at the end.

Nitpicking: Ted passed his STD to his wife but not to his lover? They had unprotected sex regularly (as Tracy prided herself).

Nevertheless 5⭐,

weird ending, like you took every LW trope, tossed them into a blender, and poured out a random collection of ways to tie up loose ends. Left me cold at the end. Unmoved, no emotion other than.. well... that was weird.

Good story, nice twist with Tracy confronting Jillian in restaurant and the serving. 5⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Good story, 4/5

Thoughtful. Original. Great dialogue. Honest emotions. Loved it.

Ed

When the author paints the whore wife with such monstrous and despicable character, doesn't it beg the question of how the husband could be deceived for so long? The whore was arrogant, selfish, held her husband in complete contempt and disrespect, and yet she was supposedly a "good" mother and a successfully clandestine wife? Makes it appear to be a Dr. Jekyll/Mr. Hyde sort of personality switching story, which doesn't make sense lacking the science fiction magic potion.

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The other plot fault is that the cuck husband didn't want to share the fuck photos with his kids, so he made his daughter go to the trouble and expense of obtaining her own photos of her mother taking the asshole's cock up he poop chute? So what was the point?

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Anyway, the stupid cuck got what he married, so he got what he deserved. And why would the children want anything to do with this faithless serial divorce machine of a mother? Would they want that sort of corrupt influence anywhere near their families?

The video from the hotel room involved commission of a felony by the PI and by the husband (hiring somebody to commit a crime is a crime in itself - and surreptitious video taping where one has a reasonable expectation of privacy is a felony just about everywhere - including DC or Virginia, wherever it was done

The video couldn't be used in the divorce case, either. The PI and the hotel chain would be liable for big bucks, as would hubby. Ted certainly could use these this criminal activities to defend an alienation of affections suit.

That would be a great fact situation for a question on a law school exam. I can assure you that hubby will lose bigger than anyone else - disbarred, among other things.

The ending was rushed; it took a lot more time than it was worth (nil, nada ... you get the idea) to try to sort it out

Alien affection lawsuit gone where. . This story played to death.

Great story Mr Guy. Great use of NC’s alienation of affection laws to bust the cheater’s asses and assets. The A of A isn’t used very often, but it’s there and it works. Just ask Fletcher Cox, wife stealing DT of the Philadelphia Iggles.

Good of a story as it gets.

@sbrooks103xabout 3 hours ago

Okay, I realize the trip is actually for her affair, but except for that, why couldn't she send a representative? What would happen if she was ill, or in an accident? -

If you try real hard I'm sure you can come up with something that will satisfy your curiosity.

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"Victory Secret?" Is that a typo? -

Pretty obvious isn't it!0

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"I've never had three loads of cum dripping out of me before" - And she's not wearing panties? -

You do catch on quick at times.

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I realize that Tracy has her own family now, but if money is tight, I can't believe that her father wouldn't pay for her trip. -

I'm sure he did, he just seems to be like type of guy.

Please, enough with these men "balling their eyes out"!! That means they are playing a sport that requires a ball. If they are sad and crying hard, then they are "Bawling". Sort of like a calf bawling for its mother. They bawl, but never ball. You've used balling in previous stories, (I do enjoy your imagination) but just like my girlfriend informs me when I text or email her, (embarrassing) no one likes to make easy to correct mistakes. It seems to be a word that several other LW writers have trouble with. Maybe you can get the ball rolling on bawling.

In the end, did Jillian get the insurance business?

Sorry but 1* for the fairytale cut and paste cheating wife story. Hate to break it to all you LDM’s jacking yourselves off to this steaming pile, but the cheating wife and the scum husband would recoup every dime they would lose in the alienation of affection lawsuits with the money they would win in their invasion of privacy lawsuits against the the cheated on husband and wife. They have the same legal expectation of privacy even in a hotel room as their own home. They could also sue the hotel and the PI firm for the same. The truth is they would probably end up with a lot more money than their spouses! This is true in North Carolina, look it up. In fact it’s happened. I hope I didn’t interrupt your little masturbating session with some facts of life.

Interesting take on an all too familiar theme. The scat references had nothing to with the story and made me dock points from what could have been a great story. This is disappointing, I'm used to reading better from you.

Good swift burn.

The emotions were well written especially for Tracy

When author wrote that "Tracy continued, "Please order me a glass of wine," it was apparent that author probably never had a family. Seven-month pregnant mothers do not drink any alcohol, or at least not someone portrayed as Tracy. The rest of the story was too simple without any explanation for Jillian's conduct, and then the STD was too contrived. Author had written better stories.

What is there that makes a writer nuke a really, really good story like this with an ending like this. The first part of this story ranks right up there with the best LW stories posted. The ending is a toilet bowl full of crap like the bowl in the story. Stinking up the whole place. We know there is a Martian Slut Ray that effects wives but can there be a Martian Disney Dumb Ending ray that effects writers?? That's the only logical explanation for endings like this one that has become common place in LW. The odds of ending like this in real life is just a little better than winning the lottery so why oh why do so many writers do this to their stories?? This story had the potential to be one of the greats with a better realistic ending.

Excellent story ruined by a completely unrealistic ending.

Yeah, I can see where this would appeal to a certain faction of LW readers but the bit about not flushing the toilet is the most sophomoric and childish reaction I can think of. The story is also packed with cliches and not that well written. The constant use of all the name calling, especially by the daughter, is ridiculous, and with the exception of some tears, there are no emotions shown by anyone.

Story was going well until the ending. Should've let Chris and Mickie get together. 3*

Well done, good story. Not sure what the full toilet added to it.

There really needs to be a better synonym for ‘slut’, because the word gets so overused in LW.

As always…just great.

Great story!!! Well done!!!

SO he gave his {now ex-} wife an STD?

Jillian is lucky that she insisted he wrap it up because she didn't want to have his kid - it probably saved her from syphilis, gonorrhea or clamydia

@mac-Lapu

Sweetie1 (Jill) did NOT get the practice! Her Dad was phasing out, but he was reported to have changed his mind upon finding out her cheating! Hubby1 abided by the pre-nupt they had prepared pre-marriage.

Pretty good take on the ‘old convention spouse’ game.

A classic LW story.

I'm fond of those.

Add to that the talented writing of the Style Guy

and that sums up to top ratings from me.

Not much; perhaps #2. Not because of the good basic plot, but because of the vile vocabulary of all but Kevin and Mickie, and the disgusting picture of Chris's excrement, deliberately piled up to disgust Jillian. Not much style from the Style Guy!

Loved the way you rolled the story out. Thanks for the effort. Slick742 *****

The down and dirty on Ted's aftermath would have been nice! Thanks for the story!

Anon, Chris got it on with Mickie for a while, then Mickie married Kevin and Jam married Chris. They were sequentially monogamous.

A great story, SG.

I liked it

I just didn't understand - Chris, Jen, Miki and Keven have polyamory or swinging?

Haha.

Jillian is the true winner in this one

Imagine getting half the finances of each 4 husbands.

Who says cheating doesn't pay?

There is not one of the 4 husbands had the guts to burn the whore. All wimps.

So what exactly is the downside of serial husbands? Honestly you boys really should check your tiny male egos at the door. Men get fucked in divorces, I can not think of a single woman who has not built a fortune from them. I can think of one who did so well she became a very wealthy woman, of course she was careful in her choices, and buried two. But as a wise woman once said, "men should like Kleenex: soft, strong and disposable".

Good story until the divorce. Did Keven know Chris had been banging Mickie for a while. Jan was a nobody and ends up marrying Chris knowing her sister banged the hell out of him. No, that's just bad juju. The additional husbands was a nice touch though.

Engrossing. Captures the reader's attention from the start. Being a BTB type of reader, this was perfect.

Very well written with some great twists and turns along the way. Hope to read more of you in the future.

Gradation but well organized. Nice that the writer didn’t fill story with boiler plate background. Got right to the cheating and the family fists in was well written. Also one other point. Number of husbands cheater accumulated gave road map without blatant details of her selfish inability to keep relationships. Mickie and husband marriage would also have been too cliche’ Good job.

I don't know why some writers depict pregnant women drinking alcohol. It distracts from the rest of the story.

Okay, I realize the trip is actually for her affair, but except for that, why couldn't she send a representative? What would happen if she was ill, or in an accident?

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"Victory Secret?" Is that a typo?

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"I've never had three loads of cum dripping out of me before" - And she's not wearing panties?

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I realize that Tracy has her own family now, but if money is tight, I can't believe that her father wouldn't pay for her trip.

Ugh. Paint-by-numbers, read-it-a-thousand-times, juvenile wish fulfillment pabulum. Why even bother?

4 stars, losing one for the revolting infantile turd revenge.

I just realized that was a different story from another author who writes new england themed works. Lol.

It was good. I could tell it was a style guy story. Your characters are usually a little more developed though. Always nice seeing a story from you regardless. Thought of one of your stories recently. I had dinner at Elephant Walk with my girlfriends.

Hmmm…I didn’t realize it was an incest story: “Jimmy, Jonny and Dad were balling at the end of the call.” Nothing all that novel here…and certainly not the best of this author’s work.