All Comments on 'Angela's Journey Pt. 02'

Best story I've read in a long time!!! Great job!!!

Good story. Too bad there were so many errors. "Threw" not " through" plus many other that detracted from smooth reading.

A little to long for me but overall a good story. Love the happy ending for Jack and Angela!!!

Seemed like there was a mistake in almost every paragraph. A proofreader would have made this a much more enjoyable read. Good story though!

I really liked your story, except for 3 things

1) Numerous spelling and grammatical errors. You really need to do a better job of proofreading.

2) (Just my opinion): Instead of 2 really long chapters, the story would have been better broken up into 4 shorter chapters. Plus you could have eliminated some of the needless extra detail (again, proofreading).

One last thing;(again, Just my opinion) I would not have had Jack kill Jim Peters. Rather, I would have had Jack beat him senseless, then had him tried, convicted and sent to prison for rape..

Again thank you for a wonderful story I laugh and cry you did a very good job of writing this and hope you have more stories like this again thank you five stars

Great stories. I won’t pile on with the spelling issues or other sentence structure issues, but we all can grow after practice. Was worth 6*s…