All Comments on 'Anna's No Longer a BCV'

both my slut wife and me enjoyed this first story , hopefuuly a follow up when his friends come over .

The writing needs work. You’re kind of all over the place. The lack of flow makes it a bit hard to read. Maybe get an editor to help you with this. I love cuckold stories, but this one was not easy to understand. Just my feedback. Take it or leave it. Keep writing.

Rolls eyes

You constantly switch between past and present tense, and overuse exclamation marks.

Hopefully this will be your last story.

The concept is not bad. I found my stories improved a lot once I accepted that I need to go through them again and again and again-- even twenty or more times-- each time asking myself if a verb was the right tense or if the sentences were in the best order. If you work at it harder, and constantly challenge yourself, your work could dramatically improve.