by Reindeer58
Hey! I'm up to chapter 36 so I must be enjoying it. So you'll excuse me if I make a couple of minor criticisms.
(1) 'tremulously' doesn't mean anything like what you use it to mean. Try 'quizically' instead.
(2) You sometimes write things like " Frankly, while I don't ever see my husband and I being in such a relationship". It should be "Frankly, while I don't ever see my husband and ME being in such a relationship". "my husband and me" is the object of the verb "see".
Even though there are a lot of characters to try and keep straight, I find that I do remember them as I read the story.
Thanks for the good post.
This story keeps getting better and better. I love all the twists and turns and the new people entering. So many opportunities for more.
This is a very well written story. I keep looking for more and can hardly wait untill I can enjoy the next installment. Please don't keep the world waiting :)
Excellent ! I, very much, enjoyed the entire story. Most men's dream world. I would have liked a little more description on penile penetrations etc. That's about the only constructive criticism I have. No negative criticism at all. I thoroughly enjoyed your story. I'll look for more of your work. THANKS!
I have enjoyed this from the beginning. My only complaint is the time between chapters:) I do wonder about the direction you took Katrina and her mother. Not the intimacy but the "bitch" aspect. Your last sentence in that section sounded foreboding. This story has been so full of love and respect I would hate to see anything upset that household - just my 2 cents.
Thanks for this story - keep up the good work!
As a person living in St. Louis, I love the references in the story to local places and it makes it so real to me! Keep up the great work!
It just keeps getting better. Well written, really good pacing and just enough twist to keep the reader panting for more.
Great Story, look for this title every time I search the New titles section. Keep on Writing
Another awesome chapter, keep them coming, I look forward to your next post...