All Comments on 'Apples & Oranges Too'

all I can say is that it was written alright

I enjoyed the first chapter very much. You worked the characters and set up quite well. This chapter seemed to ramble from sex to sex scene. The first page of incest or not incest became tedious after awhile. The third page was nothing of note except to theorize whom is/isn't sleeping with who. The only bright spot was bringing Olivia into the storyline. Unfortunately this time around the characters didn't seem "real" enough to fit. Hopefully the next chapter rebounds.

The future looks bright. Attacking people's stories without have the balls of doing it directly.