All Comments on 'April's Fool? Not Bloody Likely!'

I didn't really care for either version. The first one condones infidelity for both men & women, and the second story just makes Jake looks like a cold=hearted jerk. Neithers version worked for me.

JoeBetterBNice , thanks for taking the time to read and comment. What's the saying? "One man's meat, is another man's poison". Hopefully, somewhere down the line, I'll have a piece you'll enjoy INKENT

Did it never occur to him that he was as bad as the whole family? :S I mean, he cheated on April for quite a long time and not only with family members. He also fucked over his father in law who knows nothing about the whole 'education' but also some other guys from the family. A third version where he gets caught in the act by those guys would have been nice. Could have been another nice reflection of reality.

Thorlol, it did cross my mind as an alternative. Be my guest at making it happen! INKENT

I liked it. I don't know why readers seem to want these stories to be documentaries, this is a fun, outrageous look(s) at a situation. The irony of building the best possible cheater, while trying to keep the spouse from cheating is unique and great fun. The alternate is probably more real - and less fun (but worth the read). I continue to marvel at the huge variety of stories that are written in this category. This one was unique (twice) and gets 5 from me.

012Say, thanks for comment. I will admit, I do struggle in my mind where some seem to expect it to be real life, documentary style. There could be a new category out there. Next up from me is a full fat 20k word version of 20 in 750, may stick with this 'two for one" with a vesion tacked on that could feasibly be real life. Most Important for me is you got the irony in this tale. INKENT

A fun story. Definitely more lighthearted than the ARC series.

TexasBB, thanks for taking the time to read and comment. ARC was dark, I don't want the tag as darkest author on literotica, so variety will be key.

Next piece is about to go through editing machine, you'll have seen the skinny version so full fat one. Aftet thay expect "Have Faith.." ,which I've almost finished the first pass at putting together, is more true to life, hopefully you'll enjoy them both over the coming weeks. INKENT

Big difference in the two endings. From what I've seen, most stories with multiple endings in the same posting don't do well because people won't like one or the other

Mwestohio, thanks for reading

& commenting. So many readers of these stories seemed to feel they should mirror real life as near as can be to simply be a documentary, I thought it may be fun to try and offer those readers something that they seem to want. It's all pretty tounge in cheek :) INKENT

I think you missed the point on which plot line mirrors, or doesn't. real life. The "family tradition" is the bat shit crazy part. After that the rest of the story does have a rational flow to it. Couple rough edit points early but the rest was fine. 3.7*

Demosthenes384bc, thanks for the read and comment. Yep this one's a self edit affair, I do try, but, hey, I'm an amateur :) I try to think that as the story flows, parts of it are looked at in different mirrors, similar to those in the old Carnival type funfairs. As long as there's a people out there that enjoy the read along with my enjoyment from writing, I'll keep plugging away. INKENT

5 stars. Funny and sexy in part one, but crazy. Enjoyed it. Part 2 was (to me) real world. That is what I would do. Part one is fantasy land. Part 2 was the surprise ending. Damn good writing, thanks.

goodshoes2, glad you enjoyed and tagged along with a comment. I may start tacking the "real world" version on the end of future works, lol. INKENT

I stopped trying to understand female logic many years ago. Every woman who’s ever been part of my life had her own unique “logic” and all were totally skewed in some way. The explanation of Scarlet women didn’t surprise me. Trying to blackmail those women and scare off future sons in law just seems too much effort, and many years of watching her for signs. So his version 1 solution is the surprise.

Well given the choice of cheating on my wife to be, my wife to be being a potential slut/teacher of men and just walking away and finding a woman who I can learn with and has no family of "Scarlet" women in her background, then to me the choice is obvious, walk away from this "family". Call me old fashioned but multiple partners is just not my thing.

GarySmith69, WhoGivesAShit, thanks for taking the time to read & comment. I've offered two scenarios basically for fun, as there always seem to be commentary in LW about stories not playing out "real world style". This is all written a piece of fiction, but I gather it does beg the question "what would I do in this situation?" I suppose the "real world" take is one of the possible paths it could follow. That' the beauty of fiction, we can make it what we want.

Original -- I like original. 5*

imhapless - Thanks for the comment, always nice to see what other authors think. INKENT

Thanks for your writing.

GuyfromShades, thanks for reading and commenting, pleasures mine. INKENT

I think the first part was better as a story, but I'm not sure I wouldn't have reacted like he did in the 2nd story !

In any event... 4 stars from here.

EastCoaster1, thanks for the read & comment. In reality, it's all bout the first part, the seconds there as a humorous attempt to please those that want these stories in LW to be true to life. May have made myself a niche there :)

What a boring stupid story

No better than the rest of the crap you’ve posted so far.Far too wordy and too clever by half.

I didn't really care for it. Poor knock off of "No Reply". You should try to write a more traditional LW story as a I do think you have potential.

Hmm. Kind of liked the second version but wish it had played out more.

There is no logic to this story, he is unfaithful without any remorse, he sleeps with unfaithful women and in an act of utmost hypocrisy he complains that there is a possibility that at some point they might be unfaithful to him.

Interesting to two other stories I read along the same lines of the mother's "training" the young, future husbands of their daughters, for a number of generations. Sometimes it was just for a long weekend: others went on longer. Oh, one had the weekend where a different relative or friend of the family, "loved up" the woman due to get married, so that she had "experience" for when she got married. Then it all collapsed when one guy refused, breaking the cycle.

Yes, very thought provoking. I enjoyed it. Many thanks.

After reading the first version I was confused why the writer wrote an epilogue which was like a similar stiry then I got it its another version My confusion stemmed by skipping so many lines

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The story that was in italics was a better version more like my taste. The first version I didn't like much, everyone was disgustingly immoral even the MC. But hey it is your story.

I enjoyed this. It reminds me of the No Reply by GA and HDK (reverse order). I am curious about the ARC mentioned below. Having been introduced to Bdsm and Munches. Having a local hotel as swinger convention site it is not hard to suspend "real life" and see a group of people who actually think this way. Please drop a note or link for the ARC. You have me curious. I like the dark tales of woe that give emotional coverage of betrayal. And yes all characters here can be charged with betrayal. Well done. Gave it a five

Preferred #2.

Would have liked the ‘real’ version to be him sitting down with April and having a loving but frank discussion. He knows when he has to be vigilant so April doesn’t give lessons.

Good read overall. Just a small thing by me.

Tomh1966

good effort + points for originality. One version is the mirror image of the other, I don't think either are very realistic.

I really enjoyed both versions! Very well written! 5/5 BRB

The second ending was good! The first ending was trash!

Suggestion: Try reading your descriptive passages aloud to yourself. Some of them sound pretty funny, which I don't think you intend.

"Similar Stories" should include "Family Tradition" by bigguy33 and "No Reply" by HardDaysKnight, but probably won't.

Yup it’s like owning a cat. You feed it, pet it, and play with it. Sure they’re nice for a while but ultimately it’s just a cat. And a cat is always going to be a cat. Idk what I’m saying. Something about you can’t take the street out of a slut but the slut be in the street. Ya

The first part was very silly, training Jake to be an Alpha male? So that it will be likely that he would not be faithful to April. Not to mention using sex to get ahead in business. Thought it was well written. 2nd part was more realistic. Enjoyed both, thanks for sharing…..

I could sense Jake's frustration with the Scarlet Women in both versions ... but I preferred the second version a bit more than the first. As I was reading the first version, I was anticipating that it's ending would be like the second's - where Jake would sample the wares of the Scarlet Women, and then bail on the bride and marriage a day or so before the wedding while saying that this wasn't the type of marriage he wanted into.

Both stories have serious cons in there plot messages that stuck me wrong.

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In the sisters rationalizing infidelity due to their lack of ability to teach their husbands then taking it too their 'maybe' sons-in-law was just wrong ---- but a convenient self-fulfilling Cougar quest.

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He had the right mindset that IF April marches to her family-women's drum beat April would also become a Cougar slut, him a willing CUCK, and condemning his daughters into this family slut-dom. Nope not for me.

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The alternate story was good but lost its luster due to the unneeded harsh vulgarity. He did not need to dive into using vulgar expletives to convey his dissatisfaction. He could have walked the high road with clear concise rhetoric to condemn but keep the readers respect.

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3*** hooyah - due to story methods not writing ability (was 5*)

Dodged a bullet!

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Great story, I liked both versions

Guess it has to do with the duelality of man that Jungian thing

Hi Inkent. Thank you for the story. I do wonder why the second version wasn’t about our young hero telling his bride to be what was going on. At some point they would tell her and she would then rationalize that her infidelity would be ok since he had gotten his earlier, and it was “all in the family.” No harm no foul? It becomes a different story when she has to decide what to do, knowing the elder generation’s manipulation in institutionalizing infidelity.

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I guess I do not like Jake’s dismissal of his fiancée because of the sins of the family. If he loved her as much as he said, doesn’t he owe her the benefit of a conversation, especially since they work together?

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I grant that it makes for a longer story, but I think that the way they work that out is where the emotional core is going to be.

Version 3,,, bang those milfs then maybe walk away

The second one is better

the first version is like a teen's wet dream ?? the second one is more like real life,but he gave up some serious pussy !!

Umm, nope

Story was better although he should have recorded it to show future wife why he couldn't marry her.

This is one of the times. I totally agree with scary Harry.

LOVE slap-hapy-papy #9

I prefer number 2 because he showed some character. First story guy partook of all the free education before deciding his wife wouldn’t keep it going. Just a little shady.

The ending rescued the story from 2 stars to 5.

I think the main character related my feelings well. “Teaching” another man was simply cheating. End of tale.

Bill S.

I see now that the real "April's Fool" joke was had by the author upon those foolish enough to waste time reading this boring drivel.

Since it was only a story it was way too long. As soon as he found out what was going on he should have dumped the whole family but he was no damn better WHT was he fucking around on his girlfriend. Got a good laugh out of it.

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Much better the second one ;)

I can only agree that your short version was the better story in the end. Clear standards, clear morals and clear action!

Prefer second version,but think he should still marry April if he really loved her and tell her the family tradition was dead.The second version proved he didn't love his wife to be.

Not a bad story although I preferred the 2nd version where he left

He should have used the videos to out the women that were having affairs with him under the premise of "training" and then tell her he couldn't marry her now. I am skeptical that the other husbands never figured out that their wives were training the young men just as they had been.

"Simpsons did it!" Reminds me of the story where the young men would be invited to "plant trees" for the for the wives over the weekend while their husband's take a fishing trip knowing their wife is getting used by and 18yo all weekend

The first story MC was just a tad holler than thou wasn't he? Happy to cheat on his fiance with her family, but not allowing her to chat. Nice guy there...