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Click here"Good girl," the guide said. His voice sounded so powerful in Michelle's ears, but she couldn't tell whether he felt more dominant around her now or whether she simply felt so submissive that anyone could take her into their will. "That's it, feel your mind and your body becoming so joyously obedient. You're almost ready, ready for the final picture, the final truth. All you need to do is cum for me, pretty girl, and you can move on and sink deeper. And we both know you want that so much."
Michelle gasped, her body sagging into the guide's touch as he fucked her deeper and deeper with his fingers and his words. She couldn't stop herself anymore, she moaned openly and surrendered deeper to the hypnotic images in front of her as her legs spread wider and wider and her eyelids fluttered until the painting wobbled in her field of view. She was going to cum, she realized. She was going to cum and when she came her will would give in completely and when she gave in completely she would never be free and suddenly she knew that was exactly what she wanted. She wanted to cum and surrender and be obedient. So she did.
The orgasm was so intense, better than anything she'd felt in years. She shuddered and shook in the guide's arms, her whole mind full of the force of the pleasure he wrung out of her. It felt even better because there was nothing between her and the sensation-she didn't need to think, she didn't need to respond, she didn't need to do anything but cum and cum and cum until her mind became practically drugged with bliss. When he finally took her into the room in the center of the hallway, her mind and her muscles felt so limp and lazy that it was a relief to be able to sink to her knees alongside the other women.
They were all staring at the last painting, a picture of a spiral drawn so finely that Michelle's mind tripped over itself trying to find where any line began or ended. She let out a lazy sigh as her eyes crossed and uncrossed, and her hand crept down between her legs to tease herself while she gazed into the heart of the spiral. It felt so easy to stare now. She was Receptive and Relaxed and Willing and Obedient, a good subject who only needed to follow instructions and surrender.
"'Mindless'," the guide said. "You and the painting both. You don't need to think anymore, not ever again. Just stare, just touch, just obey, and when you're ready you can meet Gustav directly. He'll explain to you what your new roles will be, and how to fill them. But for now... just stop thinking and watch." He switched out the lights in the room, leaving them in darkness apart from the light shining on the spiral image in front of them.
Michelle stared blankly, her eyes going unfocused as she simply let the picture in front of her dissolve into a blur of light. Her mind was utterly blank; no matter how hard she tried, she couldn't summon even a single thought into her head. She felt almost cartoonishly dumb, staring vacantly into space, unable even to pretend to think intelligently, but... it was all she could do. It was who she was. She couldn't hide it, couldn't run from it, couldn't resist it. All she could do was embrace it. So she did.
THE END
- COMMENTS
Kenourioabout 4 years agoChapeau. I love the way that you lead the reader along with your subject into the joy of submission, and appreciate the restraint in stopping the story when you do, just on the edge of revelation.
That said... Maybe a part two would be justifiable? I want to read so much more of the possible world of this story!
Anonymousover 4 years agoYou craft these stories, all of them so unique, and all of them done so well. You’re a very good writer.
To the point made of “What about Penny,” I totally disagree—this story is told from Michelle’s point of view. Switching back and forth would change the entire POV, which would just make it a new story at that point. We know all we need to know about Penny, despite the temptation to tell us more about her.
However, because of the POV, I would say we don’t need the parenthetical about him locking the door. It ultimately isn’t important that the door is locked, and since we are from Michelle’s point of view, if she doesn’t know it, we don’t need to know it. I’d cut that.
I wouldn’t normally give like... writerly notes on this site, but you’re such a good writer, I felt like you deserved some constructive critique. Seriously, if your job isn’t in the lines of writing, it should be.
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoBeautifully written as always and very hot as always. I had one thought: - while all of this was happening to Michelle, what was happening to Penny? We know she ended up on her knees in the other room. I would have liked for there to have been more of a back and forth between Michelle's experience and Penny's - so we could see Penny being drawn in hypnotically and her experience of orgasm (in addition to Michelle's) -- given that her personality is different from Michelle's, I'm sure the entire experience would be quite different.
