All Comments on 'As Fate Would Have It Ch. 02'

She should definitely end up with her professor, I think you could really build up a good story if it's her and the professor

But great story so far

I definitely prefer Peter over Jack. But maybe what you could do next is add more to Peter's life. Right now, we know Zoe, and even Jack basically. But Peter is still a mystery that would determine if they should end up together. Though regardless, who doesn't love a steamy forbidden romance.

Definetely Peter oakley! I see sexy times in that apartnent of her brother :D

Also i wouldnt mind if Jack gave Peter a hard time though. More like a protective friend.

I think you've written a really nice, naturally flowing, and sexy story. I rarely post a comment, but I think the story has a mind of its own. You should follow your own pathway, even though, being an older man, I would like to see her end up with Peter. It would make the story more dream-like. I would advise you to have an editor to check out the story flow, (word spelling and grammar check).

Best of luck.

Please waiting for more of it... Dont just stop writing

i really love this story, i love the pesonality of peter and she should definitly end up with him and i really want more to happen between them