All Comments on 'Ashley Elbows Comes Out Ch. 01'

You have set the stage and outlined both the target(s) and the plan.

Before submitting the next installment though, please proof read your text. It appears that you have omitted numerous small words throughout.

Perhaps your excitement of bringing your thought-out story to fruition got to you, or you think faster than you type. In either case, reading aloud might identify these to you. Alternately, an editor might do so for you.

A good story awaits your telling and, I am sure, many others will be watching for part two.