All Comments on 'Assassin'

Beware of sexy women wearing sarongs collecting shells, all alone, on a beach? Am I right? Five stars in any event! JB Edwards

Well done. You did touch all the bases and wrote a complete story in a few word. Good job. Thanks for your hard work.

Woodmanone

When I left New Jersey they were paying only ten thousand dollars

Good short read. Hope we get more of her exploits. Five Stars.

I keep tropicals and I know about the cone snail. There are actually a few nutters out there who keep them. I loved reading a story with it. Very good and very original!

You been watching too many gangster movies. And the chances of finding a cone snail, in a tidepool, in the Caribbean (what New Jersey gangster goes to the Indian Ocean?), that was deadly was a pipe dream. She assumes he'll hold the bag in such a way the the snails "venomous tooth" will prick him. Really? Nice idea for a fictional story. But totally unbelievable.

@Anonymous (since I don't know who you are) The story never says they are in the Caribbean, only that they are in the tropics. Well, there are a lot of areas that can be called "the tropics", and cone snails are found in all warm water areas around the world, including in tidal pools or in the sand in tidal areas. You could argue that not all cone snails are that venomous. However, cone snails are known for actually having what amounts to be a harpoon that they can fire and that will penetrate skin, and in some cases even penetrate a wetsuit. Therefore, there's not much in the way of artistic license in the story. You may not believe it, but everything in it is totally plausible. MH

This story was well executed. It flies in the face of many who prefer 1500 words to describe the selection and finding of a simple plot device (i.e., the snail). You did well and had me captured from the beginning. Thank you!

Good read.

Short but enjoyable and left me wanting to read a longer story about this lady. I like the female assassin type of story and have one in my list, plus another coming out in a couple of weeks. Both over 20,000 words which is more than five Literotica pages which isn’t really long. I would think you could write a story about this lady of the same length quite easily. For such a short story, particularly on a theme which isn’t the most popular, the score is very good.

For a first story, assuming you’ve never written any fiction before, I thought it well written and, unlike a lot of first stories, not full of silly mistakes. I do hope you are still around and write some more.