All Comments on 'At Home with Shelly Pt. 01'

Short but well written. Nice relationship between the characters.

Continue with story. Awesome

Looking forward to more.

Loved this story, Hope you continue it

All the usual ingredients: ex-cheerleader, 8" dick, spelling mistakes, squirting bullshit, unreal dialogue but otherwise not so bad.

Great story and pacing, 5 stars :)

Discreet

Liked it but was too short.

Enjoyable great build up, can’t wait for the next chapter and hopefully Shelly forgets the pill and she gets pregnant

Good premise.

Nice buildup.

Sex scenes need more details.

Could have done without him having an 8" cock.

And need dialog between them abiut what's going on in their minds while they masturbate.

Needs each telling the other to slow down and not rush toward orgasms. And directions as to what they should do and not do.

Needs dialog about how wet she is. And can he smell her? And does he like the smell?

In the shower, some touching of her asshole while he washed her would have been welcome.

And, you wrote: "We both tried to be discrete..." You meant DISCREET.

Four stars.

Great story. Very hot.