All Comments on 'Aunt Ruth's House Pt. 01'

Okay, you’re getting me there and I’m wanting more, but your really making it hard. Please proofread or get an editor. Reading your story is like driving down a smooth dirt road in a Model T truck with rigid suspension then you hit a deep rut or two. Smooth passages and then a jolt! You can do it if you really want readers.

Good start - Would've liked a little more background on why he's there, how he felt previously about his aunt and cousin. Keep going!

Philtee, nothing like criticizing someone. So allow me to criticize you!!!!

You need to know when to use the correct "your" vs "you're."

"......but your really making it hard......."

You build sexual tension like no other. I look very much forward to your stories.

What does "opted not go to with." mean? Terrible grammar.

I’ve have read a lot of your stuff before and have never seen you make mistakes like in this story

So many wrongness!

When did people start wearing belts with sweatpants? Lol and I have to agree with the others terrible grammar.

Dude. You really need to find someone to proof read your stuff. Your stories have pretty good themes but there are so many mistakes that they become nearly unreadable.

Glad I found this one.

It is now a 40-minute journey to work, twice what it was before. So home to work used to be 20 minutes, but it's two hours from his former home to his Aunt's house. Tip, if you need to go back to your former home, go by way of work. It will cut your journey time in half!

So many mistakes they almost seem intentional.