All Comments on 'Avenging Angels Ch. 05'

...development of the characters that are to play such a major role in saving this little blue marble that we are floating through space on. -M

Each layer and chapter just reels me in. Your phrases are lovely and help immediately create texture of complex emotions and social realities for the each of the new characters you introduce. The detail of diverse cultural references is refreshing throughout the chapters. Can't wait to see where the Angels are going and how / if they will meet and intereact with each other.

Each layer and chapter just reels me in. Your phrases are lovely and help immediately create texture of complex emotions and social realities for the each of the new characters you introduce. The detail of diverse cultural references is refreshing throughout the chapters. Can't wait to see where the Angels are going and how / if they will meet and intereact with each other. Sorry that I inadvertantly pressed anonymous for original feedback below.

You have a good story going here and I hope that you continue. I would like to suggest, however, that you have someone edit your work before you submit. There are some distracting grammar issues that detract from the story, the main one being that you seem to change from present to past tense and back again, sometimes even within the same sentence.