Awake

Well, anon - I guess I'm glad this is the latest comment received, not one of the first 10 years ago. Although you're welcome to your opinion, you seem to have missed the point. This story wasn't about the sex, about describing her pussy, ass or breasts. This story was about emotions and the heartache of losing our most precious relation, the love of our life. When our gut is wrenched out and suddenly we wonder if "WE" can go on, over time we find that yes, we can. Surely it will change, but will it go on, and will our life be alone? Will we find another to fill and un-fillable void?

Charming premise.

But pretty much all back story.

The sex scene is really MEH.

For two people who haven't had sex in a long time -- with anyone -- there needed to be a lot more exploration. More getting-to-know the other's body.

Needed some serious invilvement of her breasts. And her ass. And her pussy.

Needed extensive involvement of mouths -- both ways.

Needed diaog during it to confirm it's what each wanted.

What about birth control?

And you wrote: "...The moon, just beginning to peak over the hill,..." You meant PEEK, not PEAK

Three stars.

Excellent story. I am sure there are many people in a situation like Janet and Rob. Hopefully they have an understanding and agreeable neighbor like Jim to develop that kind of relationship.

Lovely. Poignant and sexy.

First of yours I’ve read, really liked it, thanks

Steve Hawking was a real life example.

Excellent story I loved it.

Or it could be. I know a true to life story similar to this. It was every bit as painful.

Very well written depiction of a tragic situation.

I was impressed with the empathy so well conveyed. Losing a love is always difficult; portraying it well even more so. *****

I could have been Rob *or* Deb, thankfully got away with relatively minor brain injuries and some lingering neuro pain. Unfortunately that was shortly after my partner of 11 years completely flipped personality to the point she murdered her old self & blew up both our lives, so really I'm more in Jim's spot. Poignant piece for me, what was and might have been - unfortunately no Janet here, or pool or Samson, but at least I still have a completely functional imagination.

-RD

This is my first dip into your pool of stories, and I enjoyed it a lot. You are an excellent writer and storyteller, and I felt that the emotional content in this one was pretty much spot on, except for Janet's character.

We got some good insights into our protagonist, Jim's, mind, as well as Rob's thoughts and feelings, but not so much into Janet's (except that she was determined to remain faithful to her spouse). I would have enjoyed knowing more about her feelings about Rob and their loving relationship, and perhaps witnessed some of the discussion with her about his desire for her to seek physical satisfaction with Jim. Ah, yes, those scribblings will be featured in my own internal epilogue.

Thanks for this one, "I'll be back!"