by LacieLovegood
Last comment was a bit mean I quite enjoyed the story and didn't notice the error mentioned.
I was impressed by her brassiere-- it's usually hard to find one that has a clasp that can migrate from the front to the back, then return to its original position between the breasts in the space of a single paragraph.
Do you read your own work much?
The second paragraph is terrible, representative of the story's general sloppiness. "Remind me why we're doing this again" should have been edited to read: "Remind me why were doing this, again?" If you think there's no difference, this piece, written by a male, may be perfect for you.
I love the outdoors, and you just gave me another reason to.
Great story.
I am finding someone to make this my first experience with! Good work, thank you
the dialogue flowed very nicely. these two felt like real best friends, rather than lesbian props. well done.
mmm got my juices flowing, really hope there is more to cum :-)
WOW - nice story and you got me so aroused, I got very hard - lol. Please write more about what they do during their camping trip. Thanks :)