All Comments on 'Babs Ch. 05'

I’m just happy it’s ending.

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Thanks for the fun and enjoyable story. Well written and great characters and moved along nicely. Also thanks for your time and effort to write and submit your entertaining story for your fans to read. Look forward to more or your erotic stories. Cheers

Clearly your foot was pushing that gas pedal THROUGH the fucking floor when you drove this mess off the cliff.

Not sure if this is the best you can do....Well I hope it isnt, at least for your sake.

I think too many of your writers do the ole "Hey bro, Im going to write a story for Literotica, grab the baseball bat and come nail me in the head with it so i can create the most amazing story ever, just watch my star rating bitches!!!

Very complex and twisted story. Not sure I ever got my head around Sally and what she represented in the story. You never explored her relationship with Adam and why she never committed to him. (I know there were a sprinkling of sentences alluding to possibilities, but only superficially.) 4*

Read the Bible: its not modern, and its not marriage. In fact its as old as time and temptation and mental illness. But write on. It can't hurt. Thanks for the effort.

All in all, quite well written. Some sex positions were unclear. Sex scenes could have been better described after all it's erotica. Lastly the last paragraph wasnot an ending but a beginning! Wny end it that way?

Not my thing at all. In fact I didn’t see any point to it at all.