All Comments on 'Backseat Ride: Sitting on Son's Lap'
by married_but_curious
- 52 Comments
Alwaystaboo5 months agoStay with the man you thought you married. Such a beautiful love story.
Anonymous5 months agoho where have i read this story before thats it this must be the 5 or 6th story all the same it was like reading the same thing again and again nothing new here
married_but_curious5 months agoAuthorI changed the dad's and son's names somewhere around the fourth draft in the writing process, but didn't do a perfect job of searching and replacing the names. By the final draft, I just wanted to get it published already.
If there was some way to edit a published story, I'd fix the name problem.
Sorry about that.
LordSlamdawgg5 months agoCheating dad needs more payback! Mom needs to take it to the next level. Excellent exercise in taboo backseat genre! Full marks . *****
Anonymous5 months agoWhat’s the point of publishing the story if the characters names are ever changing? Who’s Cody? Who’s Mike?? It’s a very short story.. it shouldn’t have taken that long to edit the names. Just pulls you out of the story when you’re trying to figure out if they’re new characters you missed, or just a poor edit.
Charlette5 months agoThe kid already thinks he's a gift to women.
He is already showing disrespect to his mother treating her like a teen twit.
I am glad it is only a fantasy in someone's mind.
Or is it ?
Anonymous5 months agoI thought it was a tired, played out story-line, but u managed to breath new life into it. If zero to four boners was the grading system then I wud give this story 3.75 boners, fo' sho'.
Anonymous5 months agoIs the husband Brad or Cody?
Is the son Lucas or Mike?
You need to proof read your own work.
SpankingMyMom5 months agoExcellent story.
Cody or Brad? Lucus or Mike? Doesn't matter.
I truly enjoyed this.
Invisibleman19705 months agoStory line was good, but you need to keep the names of each person consistent and when they were getting dressed after the shower, you jumped from the soon picking out clothes to the mom trying on a dress but it read like the son was putting on the dress. Easy fixes.
Anonymous5 months agoYeah, all the name switches NEED to be corrected. It disrupts the flow of the story.
Anonymous5 months agoThe story moved along the road as they traveled to the college. The Mother got what she needed and the son got what most sons want and need, sex and a hot woman. I wonder if the unpacking and then the evening coming soon if they would end up on the floor or in the bed room riding him for all of his size and worth and her getting to cum a few more times before she was tired and need to sleep for the night and thinking of the morning to cum again.
married_but_curious5 months agoAuthorI submitted an edited draft of this story, fixing the name change problems that numerous readers helpfully pointed out (plus some teeny little things - formatting,punctuation, missing words, etc.) I appreciate the help!
Should take 48 to 72 hours for the edited story to publish. You'll know it's the fixed version if you see a comment, about it being edited from the original version, in the author's notes at the beginning of the story.
Also, writing sequel to this story. Slowly. Writing is hard.
CrankThzJackInDaBox5 months agofirst off :: the wife\the mother . she absolutely must get name happening around sequel
( don't change it like ya did countless times ) - the husband/the father , the son ................
second off :: the mother she already told son * willing do practically anything almost anything
always anything please him *
{ what if WHAT IF what if WHAT IF }
after they do return areas left
` the son he somehow he someway , meets Tiffany , same woman ,
his father , did bang did fuck , cheating on , the wife\the mother `
[ WHAT IF what if WHAT IF what if ]
the son also fucks same woman , his father , did bang did fuck , cheating on ,
the wife/the mother
" the wife the mother , she told , the son - willing anything willing whatever "
Anonymous5 months agoWow, yet again we have an unoriginal copy of an inconceivable bullshit story. Why waste your time and ours on such total garbage.
Anonymous5 months agoPlagiarism. see the story that originated in 2019 by "retired04". The is exactly the same as previous story.
Shame on you!
Anonymous5 months agoBrad????
Mike????
Sorry, that ruined it for me. If you're goin to use different names, keep them straight.
Anonymous5 months ago"The is exactly the same as previous story."
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Plagiarism would taking that story -- word for word -- and reposting it under your own name. This is not the case.
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Look at the list of similar stories off to the side, each about a mother sitting on her son's lap during a car ride, resulting in them fucking. By your definition, every single story since 2009 -- not 2019, moron -- would have to be deleted. Hell. but your definition, most stories in most categories would have to be deleted.
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You can call if a trope, you can call it a cliche, but it's NOT plagiarism. Actually, the husband cheating on her and seemingly know what happened in the back of the vehicle makes this one of the more original versions of this plot line.
Blackbear75 months agoI don't care how you pack it, slice it, or print it. 2 people having sex in a closed small room has smell. Her hubby, mom n son, and us the reader has to be totally fucking idiots to think that shit will fly. You would have to have windows down, or someone smoking to mask that smell. Sorry dumb ass writer, there are side mirrors on the doors that will show what's going on. And I have to state the obvious, why would a 18yo white boy not have his own vehicle attending college. Especially with parents pushing a luxury SUV. Off campus housing isn't college campus, so kid will have his/her own vehicle. I'm Black and could have concocked a better scenario. -2 stars.
liz33nd5 months agoi still liked it, maybe a repeat of other stories,but i still enjoyed it, wtf, the haters dont write on here, so let them complain and move on. four stars, it was a little short. and hell, make it five stars
married_but_curious5 months agoAuthor@Blackbear7
I appreciate your feedback about perceived plot holes. I will address them in the sequel I'm slowly working on.
Perhaps I need to make it more explicit in the sequel that the dad did strongly suspect what was going on, despite having a poor sense of smell, but due to his own cheating wasn't in a position to seize the moral high ground.
Again, thanks for your thoughtful comments about perceived flaws, in a surprisingly challenging story premise to write realistically and believably, even with the reader's willing suspension of disbelief.
Anonymous5 months agoYes, it's very similar to other stories and you kept changing names but other than that, I enjoyed it and look forward to the sequel.
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