All Comments on 'Bad Candy Striper'

It would be more tense if he knocked her up.

The first requirement of a story is to hold the reader's interest. You fulfilled that nicely by your stream-of-conscious phraseology and unusual adjectives in describing the actors and the action. The grammar police may have winced often but I liked the way you wrote as you thought. It seemed to have the unscripted spontaneity of telling somebody your story instead of the polished technically correct product of writing it. Well done.

story from beginning to end. Love the concept of a conceited and spoiled brat that loves a good shagging, but mostly the taste of sperm. 5* for the way you kept my attention with the details.

Nice plot of a WW II POW get "extra attention" form a candy stripper.

Lee

Great story. I enjoyed a lot

Obviously the epitome of every old mans dreams... and maybe a few young ladies as well! Great very descriptive, exciting and stimulating story.