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Click here"I think that if we do have a baby boy, Brian would be a perfect name for him."
One door had been closed off forever but another was simultaneously just beginning to creak open. Jim Morrison summed it up the best: "There are things known and things unknown, and in between are The Doors."
Balance and equilibrium.
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First off: a very special thank you to a dear friend of mine, CloudBreakChick, for leafing through my first draft and correcting several of my infractions concerning the English language. A second set of eyes was invaluable.
Secondly: as always, I hope I've managed to entertain/arouse my readers, and if you've taken the time to read this far then please feel free to add your two bits in the public comments board, leave direct feedback, or vote. I appreciate any input you have to offer.
I loved the premise of this story, but the overuse of analogies and lack of a connection between the characters took away from the story.
This story gets a Five Star rating only because it can't get a Six Star rating. This is a beautifully written story, well-paced, with an excellent plot, interesting and appealing characters, and love scenes which, if rather brief, always serve to advance the story. It certainly deserves a sequel.
Really enjoyed it. Too many authors skip over emotions to get to the sex or they give them a superficial gloss a simplistic plot device. You really opened some complex feelings and wove them through the story. Thank you.
This kind of vivid writing is definitely worth being called 'art' in my book. To drag out a single scene over so many paragraphs without it becoming boring is the work of an experienced mind.
I find it just too bad that the only connection this shortstory has with its title is a few paragraphs at the end, the last of which seems out of place to me. (Perhaps I don't recall correctly, but even so, the connection was not strong or even apparent enough for me throughout the story - which may have been intended.) I would've liked it better with a couple paragraphs about it at the beginning, for example.
Otherwise, I think the characters were introduced masterfully and the erotic scenes enjoyable. Thanks for the read.
- R
Rally good story Just met time mauve add a little part of them in theorie future without the Child Born. I know its a little cliché button it delivers a closed end to the story.
Great story. The opening page almost lost me. I an so glad I stuck it out.
Its probably the most touching story here. The emotions have been excellently potrayed and the characters are lovingly. The passion is evident. Thank You for such a wonderful story.