All Comments on 'Bar One'

Good premise, now add to this and put a full story to this and repost. Was waiting on the back story and it failed to materialise. So only a 3 redo and make it a 5. Like I said could be good but both characters need meat on the bones to be an excellent romance story.

I wanted to like this, but had to read around typos and try to figure out what you really meant to say in several places.

I guess, sometimes you just get lucky. Here's to breaks for all of us. 3*

Grammatical errors, made it feel very choppy, and hard to follow.

This reminds me of my wife and myself's story. I had her pants off within the first five minutes of meeting her and now, after 51 years, we are still together without the bloom having worn off. Sometimes love at first sight is more than an old saying. Thanks for jogging some happy memories.

Very enjoyable story!

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