All Comments on 'Be Careful What You Wish For'

I almost stopped reading this story when the diary and ghost appeared. I don't usually like paranormal stories. I'm glad I finished the story. 5 stars.

What a strange story. Not muck into the supernatural.

This was a great story and I give it 5 stars. I enjoyed the Maria spirit part of the story and that stuff is not usually my cup of tea. But Wayne needed to make up his mind between Maria and Aida and in the end he finally made up his mind. Great story.

Wow. Aida is an ACTUAL loving wife. Amazing. I know some people don't care for it, but I liked the supernatural elements of this story. I mean, frankly, a dead girlfriend coming back as a succubus to possess your wife isn't really any more crazy than some of the supposed "real life" stories in this section.

It was a 4 until the names of the kids came up so a 5 from me. Loved this story.

Aida doesn't deserve the Mc, like for real he couldn't move on from his High school sweetheart. He's the one who cheated, say if the bitch ghost succeeded in possessing Aida he literally killed her. He knew the ghost plan all along and went with it. He thought he was fucking the ghost so he literally cheated and if the possession was successful, then he would have killed his wife in cold blood. And Aida just literally forgave him. Fuck she should just move on, as the author portrays Aida to be beautiful she wouldn't have trouble finding someone and start a family, in most of this LW stories we hate the wife but the author here makes me hate the mc, Aida doesn't deserve him. She should have let the ghost take him away. I wonder how the mc would feel if the situation was reversed.

Well that one never let's the reader know where it's going. Just gotta keep reading until it gets there. And Gum Dwapps? Good thing it was Halloween. Have some gum dwapps, kiddies. Lol. Gotta give it a 5. I don't want Maria (or anybody else) haunting me.

A great read. Aida rocks!

Great story. Love all the Dwapps!

Great story. Aida is an amazing woman. A true loving wife who rescued her husband from the supernatural but also healed his soul. She's a keeper. The commenters who rant about her, obviously never read the actual story. 5 blazing stars!

Can't believe that I missed the name puns until that last line lol. Good story and it fitted perfectly in the LW category. BardnotBard

5⭐s.

SCREENPLAY!

Could have been worse, it could have been Dew Dwapps, LMAO. Not sure how we got the supernatural thrown into a Loving Wives story, but it was entertaining enough that I liked it.

Great and creative story. Thankfully Aida was not only a true loving wife but resilient and persistent to save her man. And to the many commenters below who think she cheated: you are idiots. It was staged to get him to shake him up. It is so obvious. Just read the story. Stop inventing your plot and injecting it into the author's. Well written. One of the author's best. Not his usual plot recipe.

Always thought this should end with “…and this Halloween we got an unexpected Mike Dwapps” and he rides off in the sunset on his trusted stead. Miss you SS06, there are a couple new GT’s that would like a mention in a new story ;)

Gum Dwapps 😂

An overly long and sad story about a man who was owned by two different women and loved by none.

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Excellente!

Great twist! Great names!

11/10!!!!!

Amazing story. Thankfully Aida is damn smart and observant, not to mention relentless.

Great story. Fun twists. ...thanks for minimal Mustang adulation.

Nice plot twist. Author is talented and prolific.

Shades of Stephen King. A haunted Halloween 🎃.

Fun story to follow. Happy Wayne and Aida end up together at the end. Enjoyed all the "Dwapps" names. My kind of humor. :-)

Nice touch with the names.

If he was such a nice guy,why did he let Maria treat Edith and others like she did?.

Great story. Very creative. Well written.

4 Stars on a Great Story and I loved the ending ,

Spectacular. Good as any Stephen King tale. With extended conflicts and entanglements could easily be novel length.

Basic story good but not my cup of tea

A long, tedious way to go for a ghost/succubus story that ends pathetically.

Groannn!!!! Good one.

Excellent!

Absolutely fantastic.

A second boy would have too be Elmer Fudd. That's All Folks!

5* A great read. Your stories are wonderful to read. Love, laughter, mystery.... I thoroughly enjoy them!

Evie Dwapps

18yo HS graduates don’t get to attend officer training

Today I read?, this andNOW I know I am not the one confused, the writer?, IS.

Wonderful story! Now all you gotta do is switch to Challenger Hellcats

5* just for the stupid names. Hahaha, didn't twig until the very end.

Evah_Rheddy

Great stuff...

Very good story. Thank-you!

Very good read. Enjoyed it a lot. Thanks

If he was such a nice guy,he would have dumped Maria for the way she treated Edith.

Strange but good story.

Rather humorous. Of course the two hottest girls went for the RICHEST nice guy in school!!!

I am reminded that the only difference between a good pun and a bad pun is that someone else thought up the bad one. That ending to one of ss06's very best is the sickest, worst pun ever! Just wish I had .....

Thanks,

detroitdave

You touched so many different areas of this story that it could be placed all over the listed areas. The story was so different that I really couldn’t put it down after I started reading it. I really was impressed. A Five Plus. Thanks for sharing.

Really ? I don’t know whether to laugh or cry. Your writing is great, there are virtually no grammatical or spelling mistakes but the storyline is just so bad it’s hilarious.

I realize that you must run out of new twists eventually but ghosts and ghouls ?

The name changing puns were mildly amusing to begin with but are now so corny it’s embarrassing.

Still worth reading and I do enjoy a happy ending.

Is in his stories my neighbor doesn't lie, if He says she wasn't cheating she wasn't cheating. Now trying to make someone jealous is a slippery slope, way to easy to go off of the rails. This was a Halloween Story tucked into the LW genre so lighten up, maybe lay off of the sugar for a day or two. Edith, Louise and Maude; the first two were a hoot but I always hated Maude on both shows. Now, Betty White... Only one pony and no Jeeps? I enjoyed the hell out of the change of pace, did have to take a few minutes to clean the spray of Squirt off of the keyboard at the end before I could type this. Totally did not see this one coming, Gum Dwapps, indeed. Signed: BTW

Of all this author's stories I've read this is the first one I've given less than 4.5 stars. This was weird. At least it evened to somewhat reality in the end. 3*

Sorry too far out

So much nonsense it is ridiculous.

Very off the wall story for Stang. Had me wondering if he was on steroids.

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can't get over a story this long for such a simple joke, gum dwapps. that is funny shit right there.😁

She wants him to sexually assault her while she sleeps

She is physically abusive

And after a life together of him REPEATEDLY telling her he wasnt into mind games she fakes an affair?

I'd dump her ass for the third one alone

It is obvious that you believe in fairy tales like AssClown Obama being American born or Killery being a nice person or even Bernie really wants to give “His” money to the poor !!! Hahahahaha the story was an excellent work of fiction but to you Denny Cain... TRUMP “IS” YOUR PRESIDENT !!!

That was a pretty elaborate cover for Aida's affair. I wonder how she pulled off the special effects.

... though, to be honest, if you take the scenario at face value, I'm actually more willing to believe the "deceased girlfriend comes back from the dead as a succubus" part than I am the "ostensibly-intelligent woman believes that kissing a guy in front of her husband and pretending to have an affair will make a troubled marriage stronger" aspect.

I'm still laughing. Great job. It continues to bemuse me the number of commentators who don't know what fiction means. Isaac Asimov and Jules Verne must be puzzled.

Write on! For the sake of the trolls, I do know the difference between write and right.

Edith, Louise & Maude??You really snuck that one in for us old timers. Really nice plot-line--strange characters--and fantasy & fiction too. Great! says JustJ

Must be a Trump supporter because he seems to thrive on "alternative facts."

You should publish your story at "science fiction" and not at " loving wives"!!

Ai was cheating, she realized Wayne was onto her, Ace who was fucking her for years

came up with a plan. Yep, the whole obfuscation of reality, false trails, BOLD Lies. The best part? It worked! Wayne will now willingly raised Aces children while Ai continues to cuckold him.

Matt M. would be proud of this story!

Not bad... not bad at all...

-jaye-

You had me chuckling at many lines in this one. The only thing I didn't care for were the punny names of the characters.... ;-) But hey, you're the boss, so if they work for you, go for it!

And BTW, I love happy endings. Thanks for a fun read!

Laughing...a third child would have had been named Knows.

Thanks for the story.

I like SS06's writings. I'm always looking for his newest. They are fun, insightful and as writing, they flow. BUT...to figure out how to create a story that ends with that last line full of puns, well that takes imagination as well as skill. 2nd time around and it is still so very funny.

Thanks SS06.

I liked it.

Hi there peoples! Me again I have a name for his family! Either Pussina or Prudence (some parts of England Puss is short for Prudence) so giving the name Puss Dwapps or Richard he will be Dick Dwapps. Peoples Lighten up have fun I AM THE AUTHOR IS AFTER ALL THIS IS FICTION LITEROTICA EXPECT THE UNEXPECTED. LOVE YOU ALL! BYE! OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE. .........GREG♥

Really a decent story until all the supernatural halloween ghost story crap. Lost me big time when that stuff started. And the last paragraph must have been just plain stupid for stupid's sake. I mean, Ai Dwapps, Gum Dwapps, and all the rest?

Puh-leeese!!! 3Stars, and I think that's generous.

and the guessing is done, what is your choice TK U MLJ LV NV

So the guy who his wife is cheating with comes to him spinning a story and claiming they never fucked? Wayne Droops buys it and Aida and Ace are free and clear, nice.

Of course the obfuscation/smoke screen of the whole "Possession thing" works to befuddle and confuse poor old Droopy Cock or as he's now known Wayne Cuckold!

Dumb, dumb, dumb.

WOW! This story has more twists than a 50s&60s dance floor? Love the story, most of all I love the ending with the kids. Love you all! Bye. Greg. Oh 10 stars = 100 %. Bye.

She fucked Jack in HS cause she just let it happen. She fucked Ace cause it was expected. She came home without her skirt and panties after being married for years. No love there, no romance, just a lack of morals and total disrespect for herself and her wimp husband Wayne.

Uggh, ugly story. Well worth the 1 star given!

Glad it ended like it did, but WHY would ANY woman think that cheating (even faking it like Ai) would EVER gain your man back??? This story was a lucky twist otherwise she would have lost EVERYTHING.

You are probably too young to remember the original shaggy dog story, but the basic plot was: "in the days of old" there was a midget knight in armor that went into a bar to get out of the storm. He brought his steed, a big shaggy dog that he could ride, in with him. After drinking, and getting into a fight the bartender ordered him out of the bar. The midget responded " You are not really going to throw a knight out on a dog like this". But your story was a lot longer to get to Ai Dwapps. a 5 star, great read.

And I thought that the children's names were a hoot.

For sure, a fun story.

Yes that was something out of the ordinary. Would like to read more of such quirky tales. 4 stars are in order.

Scary, fun, funny! Loved it! Should be a movie of the week for Halloween. Thanks for a very enjoyable read. The names were hilarious. Keep up the great work.

Well written but the ghost/succubus was just too far out there. Then you put the final stake thru the heart of this silly story when you just couldn't help yourself with the names. A "3" for writing. A "1" for the succubus and the names. Just didn't enjoy it.

I assume the last part of the story was on account of this being a Halloween Contest entry. Right? I have trouble with the title because I did not pick up anything in the story telling me our hero wished he had Maria (Irish?) instead of Eye. And the names! Not funny to me. Not even cute.

Fantabulous! Enjoyed the story very much. Thank you SS06. The ending sentence was cool. Cheers! c29

I enjoyed this story I don't think you could better it. Keep up the good work.

He believed her readily enough when she finally told him, so why not from the start? Could've saved a lot of grief for all round!

The title says it all. And, it is in the right category!

I'm not a usual fan of your Halloween stories but this was an excellent read

A great Halloween tale. Almost like "sending a knight out on a dog like this". Especially when all the reina dwapps are falling on my head.

Another great story. God keep on writing. You have a creative mind. Especially when you Dwap all these funny names LOL

Bwaaaa Haaaa Haaaa!!

I call foul on those names!

Truly enjoyed this one. Thanks for sharing.

A Halloween story ... a good one people can relate; you get angry and wanna fix it somehow only but there are so many twists and you discover there is only one thing and one thing only that can save it ... LOVE ... Thank you for a good and loving story! Now I must find my most obvious better half and hold her tight followed by a ton of kisses, affection, and most all ... Love

Good Job!

I love a good Halloween story and this Rocked!

This was extremely unbelievable entertainment. Wow!!!

and its Memorex sublime, TK U MLJ LV NV

Nice story but at the end it seemed like you wrote the whole thing just to get in a low, allbeit excellent, pun. Really?! Ai Dwapps? Penny Dwapps? Worst of all, GUM DWAPPS?!! Frickin excellent! I give it 5 just for the whole pun.

I liked the twist but some major plot holes needed to be addressed.

After 7 years of marriage Ai instead of talking to hubby to get him out of his funk pretends to have an affair! How the fuck will that fix their marriage problems and hubby only gets Ace's word it was all a hoax?

She also takes hubby mentally having an affair with his dead ex not to mention his readiness to trade her soul for said dead ex's as not a big deal.

No pre-nup and no PI to see if she was cheating? Just doesn't do it. In order for you to get this story to continue and get to a conclusion you had to leave out those two basics. Great idea but missing those two elements that should be there made it easy to get on with the story but leaves it with a feeling of just another ok story