All Comments on 'Beach Gal'

You have a couple of sections where you duplicated paragraphs.

- "Good?" She asked with a teasing smirk... - is where one of the duplications starts.

Otherwise, a good story.

There are a few paragraphs that have been copied and pasted and so repeat themselves. It's rather jarring.

Really well written story. You should continue it.

Interesting. It actually moved along at quite a clip, but still was not too fast. Hopefully it will continue in the same vein, but with a little more exhibitionism in it. Have us, the readers, feel the rush your characters feel when they are nude in public. Show us you know that tingly feeling and the effect it has on you. Do it with intrigue; not too blatantly. . You're doing fine, so far. And, you'll get better with experience. Thanks

Fantastic story.. possibly add some unprotected sex with cream pie and definitely add anal to it

I like to read more chapters of Rob and Kitty.

Outstanding story. Thank you for sharing.

I'm ready for more of this story. You write great.

continue it awesome story

Well written.I like the fact that sex is mixed with falling in love.

This is the way things really happen,and it is a breath of fresh

air.