by zaxxon
Hooters? Really??? Grow up! Stopped reading then and there. I’m a woman and this just turned me so off. Almost quit with the obvious “squirting” references about the lotion but gave you the benefit of the doubt there.
Love it! The story starts and ends a little abruptly and cheesy terms like "fuck-melons" and "fuckrod" are a major peeve of mine, but this is otherwise very well-written and DEFINITELY needs more chapters!!!!
Definitely needs to be continued. Both of them removing their swimsuits and...
Great story, I loved it! Hopefully you can take that question mark off of "To be continued." :)