Try the free LITEROTICA WEBCAMS!

All Comments on 'Beautiful'

by MonaHaze

Sort by:
Newest FirstOldest First
  • 3 Comments
BahamaBahamaabout 11 years ago
Damn

Thats hot for true . Damn !

JendehJendehabout 11 years ago
I love the butch/femme dynamic

I wish there were more stories on Lit like the kind you tell. Well written and very hot. I can't get enough butches in my fiction. Great job.

FiveWolvesFiveWolvesover 10 years ago
Well done!

That's your first submission? Wow. I can't wait to see how you evolve as a writer. Only suggestion (minor): Re-read for continuity before submitting. She tosses off her jacket and then takes it off again later. You can write!!

Anonymous
Our Comments Policy is available in the Lit FAQ
Login
Post as:
Anonymous
Login