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by MonaHaze

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FiveWolvesFiveWolvesover 10 years ago
Well done!

That's your first submission? Wow. I can't wait to see how you evolve as a writer. Only suggestion (minor): Re-read for continuity before submitting. She tosses off her jacket and then takes it off again later. You can write!!

JendehJendehabout 11 years ago
I love the butch/femme dynamic

I wish there were more stories on Lit like the kind you tell. Well written and very hot. I can't get enough butches in my fiction. Great job.

BahamaBahamaabout 11 years ago
Damn

Thats hot for true . Damn !

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